Doll

About an abandoned doll

Here I sit upon the shelf
As if I'm owned by someone else

The door shut tight
As dark as night

In here it isn't no fun
No one to play with

I have my memories
Of days gone by

When i was there
When you laughed and cried

When i was your friend
I still hold those secrets

When you held me tight
As you slept at night

I'm still your doll
Though you have grown old
You don't need me anymore

So ill sit in this dark store
Your bedroom cupboard

Hoping one day
To be played with some more

Author's Note

Something different so please be gentle

Reviews

[Dr. Wood ?]

great idea..In my humble opinion it could be made better with less SHOWING..like the cupboard at the end...We know that the doll is in a dark place...Imagination goes to the reader if the cupboard is not mentioned..Sorry to go on but it should also read In here it IS no fun..not ISN'T......I would simply cut out the last 4 lines and replace them by a repeat of the first 2..Or something like that...I may be totally wrong

[Chris Rampersad]

I like it. While reading you kinda get a empathetic feeling of loneliness. for the doll. man i'm a grown a*s man and if i see that doll in this poem i goin to play with it.

[PoeticVandal]

This reminds me of that song from toy story 2..
But beautiful..Also I agree that the cupboard was unnecessary, since you have already mentioned about shelf in first line...
All in all a good try..

[Molly]

I think that it's great to be able to picture the scene in your head. This was a wonderful poem and I enjoyed reading it.