Nightmare.

Haiku

The Raven crows loudly

Enters my dreams and takes hold

My nightmare never ends

Author's Note

Tell me what yout think.

Reviews

[Mark]

My favorite of your Haiku I have read thus far. Try to bear in mind that Haiku is an Oriental form, and is intended to spark thought, not resolve issues. Avoid rhyme at all costs, but add alliteration when you can. Lastly, avoid making it personal; leave the reader open to accept YOUR nightmare into his own exper-ience.To reinforce the symbolism, you may wish in future to offer the protagonist human characteristics:
"The Raven stared, sneered/Skulked into my mind, took hold/The nightmare, reborn....

[Clockwork]

A very nice piece. I agree with mark. The other tip that I would give is that Haiku normally have to have something to do with nature. The "season" word or phrase most often times comes in the middle line of the piece. Don't let this take away from your work, it is a very well organized piece and it has real power.

[Kelley]

I think that was one of the best Haiku's I have ever read.
Most of them dont make any since, but this one did.
Anyway great write!!!

Kelley

[Jae]

my short and sweet review,

nice work. i like it. just my style.

love, ~rem~

[Dionysus Cain]

pretty good. i like the darkness. entering our minds is always evil, it is just the simple fact , do we want it to take over or do we keep a partnership... do we keep it as a friend or enemy? nice write

[Frances O'Neill]

Another one that believes that to beware of ravens and crows is not a choice we make ourselves, but

it is some kind of bizarre sensation that befalls us regardless in encountering

one and is only resultant in ominous outcomes, nevertheless, nice haiku!