The Hanging in the Garden

Sorry for the series of very short macabre poems, i know better than to show so many of the little ones, but i guess they count for something right? The plague refers to suicide, and death obviously.

In the garden they hang with black rope and wire.

They sleep with the roses while wearing black laced attire.

They chew on the ivory flowers that sprout below their hanging bed,

black sheets sunken below their heads.

Their nooses tighten, their skin grows pale, lips parched - desiccated.

 

In the Garden I saw untouched earth and suspended feet above.

Their feet blackened with warning of a hollowing plague to come.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

The photo gave life to the poem. I like the description. Allowed the reader to fall into the mystery and the story in the poem. A powerful ending to the outstanding poem. Could be a good lead in for a tale of mystery.
Coyote

[Heather Clayton]

Very moving piece.

[Sarah W. French]

The rhyming was perfect and wasn't child like at all. The pictures the words brought to my mind were spot on as well. beautiful poem :)

[reflectingus]

Wow, what a vivid encounter of a death. Rather vivid, powerfully imagery here. I felt my heart beat faster as I reached the last line of the first stanza, you have just the perfect amount of suspense, and death which is just so depressing, and the way you described it, amazing. I can't help but admire the beauty with which you have written a fierce account, and the conclusion was simply flawless, and I'm a fan of that lifeless mood you managed to create in the end. Loved it.

[Perfect Mistake]

Beautifully written :3 Im totally jealous cause i can do no such thing with rhyming that actually sounds good/decent. Your rhyming perfectly flowed and created dark images, well done.

[joshua deathdealer]

This is awesome!! I love your style. Your imagery is dead on.

[Lunny]

nice ^^

[khalid]

i like how you have written this poem with all the images and similarities. i liked how you could pick words making very sweet musical flow and rhyme. i like the philosophical point of view you wanted to say behind your poem, i think it is something political..
i have really enjoyed reading this poem
thank you for sharing

[Liderien]

this is good,really good.

[Khal Attero]

Ahh, I enjoy Gardens, this one came perfect. Good stuff!