Spinal

Yet again i make up words.

It cracked my spine; it engulfed me asunder

Into a blue raging fury, new to my pallid eyes.

The fury swept oceanically into my gaze

And lifted me above the stones hidden under a gray sheath.

Demurely sensual to my ears,

The waves cast high above my blue laced bastion,

And settled abruptly beneath my feet

As I fell to my knees.

The rocks cracked my spine, severing the nerve.

My eyes bathed in a new white light

As my baptism lingered under the water.   

Reviews

[∠( ᐛ 」..]

absalutly amazing! The imagery is just perfect. the metaphors are excellent. and the way you picked out extodinary words, I love it! my favorite line was " The fury swept oceanically into my gaze, and lifted me above the stones hidden under a gray sheath." pure fantasy indeed!
great work my friend.
100/100

[Hannah Messer]

Very powerful. The imagery is fantastic. The last three lines are my favorite. Well done. I can close my eyes and picture the whole thing.

[Jem Sagcal]

I can imagine the scenery and the pain so well. This was definitely a good read!

[Coyote Poetry]

Anything to do with the spinal is painful. The poem was painful to read. Good description make the injury come to life. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[khalid]

very nice image you have drawn here. i felt the pain of it. very nice words picking and exciting metaphors. i have really enjoyed reading it..

thank you for sharing

[Allycat]

This is absolutely wonderful!
You always use such unique and outstanding imagery and metaphors
You have an incredible way with words
Good job