Blind

Just another thing that came to me...

Blind

 

There’s a school teacher preachin the Golden Rule

While the cruel world’s smiling like she’s a fool

And we sit there laughing, like “Oh you’re cool”

Because the dark’s so strong and we’re all it’s tools

 

I saw a little girl praying in church today

She said “Mommy says daddy has gone away

And he’s never coming home, he’ll never stay”

How’s it fair her daddy sinned yet she has to pay

 

And there’s a young man drinking out on the streets

About to come home to the wife he beats

But first he’s gotta go see the girl he cheats

Cause he’s just kickin at their hearts with shredding cleats

 

There’s good people in the world but they’re not there

If it ain’t happenin to them, then they don’t care

These broken hearted broken people cry out in despair

But their cries fall on deaf ears and empty air

 

And there’s a memory of light in the back of their minds

All alone at night wishing they could hit rewind

It’s the ones stumbling and searching that finally find

That the light’s still there but the worlds gone blind

Author's Note

Does it sound like a rap to anyone else... I wrote it while I was thinking about the song "Hands Held High" by Linkin Park... What do you think?

Reviews

[DemitriJ]

Beautiful, I found myself tearing up after reading this. The world has seemed to have gone dark with no understanding. Only those who have been through hell could understand those who are broken. And you're right, the world has gone blind, into thinking that the world is perfect and everything happens for a reason. That some higher power controls us and it is what is meant to be, but what is the reason for those who've done no wrong to pay for other peoples mistakes?

[Elizabeth Porterfield]

I'm really loving the depth of your reviews today:) maybe it's just since I got drunk Friday, but I kinda didn't expect it:) Thanks:)

[skyelight]

Yeah it does sound like it would go with the song and I think it is a very swell poem and I really like it. I think a lot of people could definitely see something in this :)

[Elizabeth Porterfield]

Thank you so vary much:) I'm glad you like it:)

[skyelight]

I did and your welcome!!

[Elizabeth Porterfield]

XDXD

[Eric Cox]

Strong words through a cool write that does have the rhythm of a song, excellent job!

[Elizabeth Porterfield]

Thank you so very much:)

[Eric Cox]

You're welcome.

[Elizabeth Porterfield]

:)

[KeeD]

I do get the rap angle I was humming it and then just started spitting out the words of this poem to my own beat.. i loved it ..

[KeeD]

i tried rapping and recording it but i failed lol xD but it's so freaking good..

[Elizabeth Porterfield]

Thanks:) I am very flattered that you actually tried to record it:) as well as the fact that you enjoyed it:) I'm so glad it's been very much liked:)

[Holly Mason]

I do not know about the rap angle
but this is an AMAZING write truly
Thank you for sharing

[Elizabeth Porterfield]

And thank you for reviewing:) I'm glad you liked it:)

[Rekain]

Yeeeees....yes it does. I sat her singing it out loud as I read it and it does have a nice beat to it.....Now I feel the need to make music.

[Elizabeth Porterfield]

Thanks Rekain:)

[Distant horizons]

Beautifully creative piece, and so true. The world when it's going the right way for people, is all too blinkered to those not so fortunate. Really enjoyed this, and yes, does sound like a rap :-)

[Elizabeth Porterfield]

Thank you so very much:)