My Mythic man lives. - (Freeverse Poem)

3am this time. I'm mixing it up a little! Update - This was originally intended as a free verse poem. I've updated the title in response to criticism.

You bring me sunshine in rain,

but it's never the same

rays twice a day.

Each time a new take or way

of viewing the world, night

or day. Love is the light

you shine, and dreams

are the thoughts you beam.

Your mind is a cenote

to explore and dote,

to delve into, never to return the same

but, never less, to still return human.

There are no words or vowels

or consonants I could vow

how much I am in love

with you. You and I are woven

together through space and history,

pieced together like an unsolved mystery.

Tied by heart by ribbon and twine,

I'll forever be yours and you'll forever be mine.

Reviews

[Karen]

Beautiful poem! I love the way the poem begins. I never thought about the rays of the sun as being different than yesterday's rays, and how that would reflect the way a person makes me feel. Creative (and creativity in this field is a breath of fresh air!). I also had to look up the word "cenote" but really like the word AND the way you use it in this poem. It's great! Thank you for writing and sharing this poem with us!

[Soleil RunningWild]

My favorite line by far are the last two lines.
I love the use of rhyme that you have with the words, and your smiles which you used. :D
Well done.

[Cory Firestine]

I love this poem Elinor! I feel like the first verse leads up to the second and I like your style for the poem in itself, with the structure of your lines and the uneven verses. Very well done.
You can actually work well at 3am, whereas for some people, namely me, my eyes would be crossed from trying to focus on something at that time. Lol!

[J. Kell]

I like the last lines of this poem very much they have a good rhyme and express the feelings of love really beautifully.

[Lydia Shutter]

Love is truly a mystery and it is a bit of sunshine in the rain. The rhyming in the first stanza is a little choppy...the meter is off. I think the second stanza is easier to read than the first, but I liked them both. Lydi**

[Douglas White]

I would disagree with despitegreathands on the two verses. Emotion is not a thing that is symmetrical in any way, and (just my opinion here) shouldn't be written that way.

I like how you describe what it means to you in the first, and what you can't find the words to express in the second (although I think you did quite well anyhow).

And I love the use of "cenote". It's rare that I have to look something up, but I love it when I have to. You made use of that very well, I might add. Nice touch.

[Rita L. Sev]

You and I are woven
together through space and history,
pieced together like an unsolved mystery...

This is a great image. Some good thoughts here, a bit disjointed but easily fixed without changing substance.

[SyberRose]

Your mind is a cenote
to explore and dote,
to delve into, never to return the same
but, never less, to still return human.

I would add that as a separate stanza...just space that...would be more pleasing to the eye...
I enjoyed reading especially the second stanza...all the couplets rhymed except the first three lines in the second stanza which maybe you could rhyme them too...I enjoyed reading Elinor and thank you for the RR.

[Sam]

Wow that was deep. Very deep but I love the different angles you use to describe love. It was amazing. I love how it ends...You and I are woven together through space and history, pieced together like an unsolved mystery. Tied by heart by ribbon and twine, I'll forever be yours and you'll forever be mine.
I get the feel of the love the bond the kiss lingering. Very nicely penned Elinor. Thank you for the rr.

[Audrey Rey]

I actually like how uneven the stanzas are, I think it fits the message that they carry. I may even prefer the first part to the second because I love how untraditionally ''broken'' the verses are at times. I think that gives it an extra spark of personality :)

[Zero_Edge88]

Ooh aah, that's how I feel in there. There is a person out there that loves, a romance budded into a lovely bloom! They call it flowers and when they are not only in the garden they are all around our lives when we stop and smell them. It is the beauty of knowing that love exists but it's not a myth rather it is the idea sprung forth into an action where the two souls were meant to meet for each other.

Have a beautiful day Eli :)