No adequate view.

No adequate view.

A Poem by Elinor Williams
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Another ranty one that I'll probably edit rah rah rah Wrote this at midnight.

"
You closed your eyes,
to truth.
You covered your ears,
to reason.
but you see it as treason
when someone challenges you
with a new point of view.
Tell me, friend, when did you 
decided who
was worthy of your attention
or your affection?
When did being a derivative
of society's wishlist
become the "in thing"?
In your domain, you are king,
you are god,
but how odd
that in a world you owned,
created and loaned
you are alone.

© 2013 Elinor Williams


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I have met the 'bully of the domain' recently. I tried to avoid them but they seem intent on putting me in their sights and I have to reluctantly take action to protect myself Elinor.
It'll be a figurative fight to the death with 'real-life' consequences for us both but I am done turning the other cheek.
Such a relevant write to me at this moment in time. Thank you
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Posted 11 Years Ago


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Sam
This is a nice thought to ponder. But it is so true and as the old saying goes "It is lonely at the top" I like the way you wrote this. The meaning and illustrations were great. Thank you for the read request. Have a great day. Pen on!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Elinor Williams

11 Years Ago

Thank you very much! I agree, there's a saying here of "The higher up the tree you climb, the more b.. read more
Sam

11 Years Ago

HAHA! I like that one. I like it really well. Thank you keep writing your words are powerful. :)
Oh the view from the top, it sure does get chilly around. They say when you reach it, the way down is one too hurtful and even more excruciating once you hit rock bottom. It's a view coveted by some while others look at it with a disdain. For the chills don't run at the top they run side by side with it. The feelings consumed, emotion drained and the next we know the logic takes more than anything. It is the ulterior motive of to those who feel superior when really they are the embittered inferiors! Sadly, to be on top doesn't give us the best view for what is found in plain sight one must look through middle ground and long for what it means to be more human than anything else in this plane we are in.

Thank you for the share Miss Eli. Have a great day and enjoy your week! :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


this was very interesting and insightful.

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I felt that this was a very thoughtful poem and that it speaks poetically of the consequences of utter control.

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won't say too much because i dont know the story behind this piece.. Peace always.. xo shallimarRose

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this reminds me of my father. constantly playing god and shooting down anyone who does not have a similar opinion. but hey, it's lonely up there at the top when you think you're absolute royalty and everyone else is dirt. they will surely end up alone. loved this piece- the emotion shone through!

Posted 11 Years Ago


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Elinor Williams

11 Years Ago

Exactly how I felt! It the fact that respect works both ways and if you won't respect my view, I cer.. read more
This doesn't really strike me as ranty, to be honest. This strikes me as more of a commentary of how individuals in this society have become more and more isolated by technology that keeps up "plugged in"; how we compare ourselves to the ultra-rich and try to imitate something that isn't even close to reality; how we judge each other over the most trivial things instead of what actually has meaning. This is a small work with large implications, for those who are willing to see. I enjoy work like this, writing that seems so simple, and yet can hold realms of meaning. Thanks for sending this my way.

Posted 11 Years Ago


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Elinor Williams

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much for your comment! ^-^
An interesting write. The self imposed solitude of the pompous asses of this world. I enjoyed the rhyme scheme here with the breaks from rhyme at the start of what could be a second stanza. Nicely done.

Posted 11 Years Ago


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This makes me think of the Great Divide of society - the people and the government and how the government think they know everything and want to suppress, oppress and control what everyone of us does.

It's lonely at the top but when you've lost the trust and faith of the people you once swore to protect, it's about to get lonelier.

This is probably far from what your intention was but a poem speaks to us in different ways and this was how I interpret it. I liked it very much. Very well written and it flowed well.

Posted 11 Years Ago


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Elinor Williams

11 Years Ago

You're actually pretty close! Very well analysed :D it was more about someone I know, but in extreme.. read more
Some people simply cannot maintain a friendship with someone who disagrees with them THese people very quickly find themselves to be quite lonely...

Posted 11 Years Ago



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Tags: ignorance, treason, reason, eyes, ears, challenge, sense, attention, affection, derivative, wishlist, domain, god, odd.

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