The Great Bank Robbery

A story of a villain who gets misled by his crew

"Sir the bombs are ready" said one of my 20 minions.

"Excellent" I said with a laugh.

"You boys get 5% of whatever we rob"

"5% your kiddin' us right boss?"

"POP!" went the sound of my gun.

"Anyone else want to speak out?" I said as I blew the barrel of my gun.

Unexpectatly we hear the sirens, "We'll be caught!" says my second in command

"Blow the fumes!" says Cluny, my general.

"FIRE IN THE HOLE!"

"BOOM, go go go get the money" meanwhile a minion of mine gets blown up by the intensity of the bomb.

"One less to pay boss, hehe" says Cluny with a chuckle.

"POP, two now."

As the cops enter our street my second in command says " You'll never catch me ali....."

And was shot down right infront of my eyes

Of course that was just going to cost me more money I thought in my head

"Take cover!" says one of my men

Bullets wiz past our head as we unlock the safes.

"Get the bags!" I yell with anger.

We run through the front door and load the truck.

"Ready to move out sir, execpt one thing we can't carry all these men"

"Well were going to have to fix that" I say with a smurk on my face.

The next thing I know he's in a car going 65 miles per hour.

"That takes care of it boss"

"And this take care of you, don't let'em in the truck boys lock it and lets go"

"Sure thing boss" says the driver.

BONK, the next thing I know i'm out in the street with cops around me.

"Those backstabbers for all i've done, i'll get revenge"

"I'm going to jail for now, but metal bars won't keep me in!"

"You banks better lock up tight!"

"MwhahahahahahaMwhahaha!"

 

 

Reviews

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cool story

[Fran Marie]

A great story of bank robery by your mad villians~
well done and very creative piece indeed! good luck in the contest

[absynthestar]

very confusing. a story driven by dialogue, all jumbled together... I'm still not sure about the ending, and I had to read it at a slower pace than I'd have prefered. Needs some serious work.