The Lid Keeps Popping Off

When in love needs to become just love.

I put my love for you in a tiny bottle

Tried to stuff it away where I wouldn't see it

Where I wouldn't notice it

I tried to hide it in the tiniest bottle

in hopes it would hurt less.

But the lid keeps popping off

And my love for you wanders here and there

The memories make their way through my mind

and seep into my veins

Til they get to my heart

and make my chest feel like it's too small

Too small to hold it all

The feelings escape for a bit

I try to catch them

I try to stuff them back

But the bottle is too small

The lid keeps popping off.

Author's Note

Any feedback is appreciated.

Reviews

[Lenah Mehzabin]

I don't know what to say ! I loved it really I'm just staring what a piece you wrote !

"I tried to hide it in the tiniest bottle
But the lid keeps popping off
And my love for you wanders here and there"

Enjoyed very much :)

[Elie Marie]

aww thank you :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed the poem. I did like the ending. Hard to close a jar with love. Love can expand or delete. Nice flow of thoughts led to the very good ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Elie Marie]

thanks Coyote!

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

i love this poem, the imagery was wonderful! Really fun way to address the emotions one experiences when trying to get over love but is not ready to let go, fantastic well done!

[Elie Marie]

thank you so much :)

[Emily]

Love this poem!
One of my favorites now!
Keep it up!!

[Elie Marie]

thanks Emily

[The StoryTeller]

I think it shows how we are scared of being hurt (for me, again, not just the first time) and therefore try to not admit we're falling in love and not fall for that person. But the thing is, it'll keep escaping, and we might as well take the chance anyways. As in taking chances reminds me of my friend Ishita's poem If I Were You. Anyways, great job at capturing that. :)

[Elie Marie]

thanks. I totally agree.

[The StoryTeller]

I'm glad you do, and I'll try to not stuff it into a tiny bottle in which the lid keeps popping off for the future. :)

[Elie Marie]

I mean my situation is a bit different. I'm not stuffing it away cause i'm scared of telling.

[The StoryTeller]

So why are you stuffing it away?

[Elie Marie]

that's a long answer... and a tough one. if you read Always Always and DOn't drown yourself. that'll give you an answer.

[The StoryTeller]

Okay I will. Can you send me a read request for both just to make sure I remember them? I gtg for right now currently.

[Cool Girl]

I like it!! The metaphor is great:)

[Einstein Noodle]

i like the metaphor .. its descriptive and easy to relate to .. your last line says it all ..
E.