My Sun

I told you, I f*****g knew something would happen. I feel the wind and sun for one mighty second and then I'm swept away for another trip into cold darkness

When I'm with you I'm in the sun

Now the sun is gone...And It seems like the sun, has burnt out. And there’s no hope.

Human kind with find other sources of light

But nothing will be loved more, then the almighty sun that used to shine so bright.

I love you... You stupid.. Stupid boy..

Reviews

[Relic]

Despite a disappointing first line this is pretty good. That warmth of someone so resembles a sun that lights our way through life.

Human kind with find other sources of light ?

[Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse]

Hey! This is good! I like it a lot. I just wrote something like this but towards the moon, take a look at it tell me what you think.
Titled: Desirous Triumvirate