The Battle of 体

The Battle of 体

A Poem by Chelsea Marie
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Just incase anyone was wondering, the character in the title is "karada", or the japanese word for "body".

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If beauty walked in sheets of humility,

If demons fashioned clothes of human skin.

There are flaws, a lack of stability.

We would walk in shadows of black storms, thin.


Call out to spirits of thy keen nature,

Whisper to a wind that strains to listen.

Take my hand, evolve this new composure.

Hear this well, these songs that strive to glisten.

What we cannot grasp, what we cannot know

Holds us in silver, binds our hearts in fear.

And the metal that burns the skin, the eyes close.

Tyrants of false hope bring false kindness near.


The lies of a fantasy drown well-being.

Moving and feeling, but without seeing.

© 2012 Chelsea Marie


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Chelsea Marie
Criticisms are welcomed, just be civil. Thank you :)

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very good elegant poem

Posted 12 Years Ago


Chelsea Marie

12 Years Ago

Thank you :)
"The lies of a fantasy drown well-being." I've never heard anything phrased this way. Simply brilliant. Great job, wonderful imagery. Altogether a great poem and a pleasure to read.



Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chelsea Marie

12 Years Ago

Thanks a lot :)
The beauty and elegance of this poem is particularly obvious to anyone with an ounce of sence! excellent job absolutely beautiful!

Posted 12 Years Ago


Chelsea Marie

12 Years Ago

Thank you very much :)
Thank you very much :D
Yeah, I actually got into writing sonnets after reading many of Shakespeare's.
He was practically the king of sonnets :p

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

zainul

12 Years Ago

Thanks for the pursuit of Japanese.I regret that I can't speak a single word in Japanese but write .. read more
Chelsea Marie

12 Years Ago

Thanks!
zainul

12 Years Ago

You are always welcome!
Amazing sonnet with awesome meaning.
Great rhyming abab cdcd efef gg !

Concluding lines are so mind blowing !

"The lies of a fantasy drown well-being.

Moving and feeling, but without seeing."

Posted 12 Years Ago



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