A Paradise of Strangers

You found yourself 

in a paradise of strangers

all going one direction or another,

though none towards you. 

You stood alone on the sidelines

not sure who to follow

where to go 

Seemed everyone had a place

except you. 

But then, 

you decided to 

make your own way

and took off

through that sea of strangers

into the unkown. 

Reviews

[Priya]

Wow. I more than just love this! In so few words, you have captured a moment perfectly. The travails of life, the loneliness and desolation, but also the will to fight against the tide, to overcome seemingly insurmountable odds, to derive faith from within oneself. The fact that I could extrapolate so much from so few words is testimony to your skills.

[Coyote Poetry]

Could to escape places where we do not belong. I do understand this poem. Good to wander away and find a place where we can be content. A very good ending to a excellent poem.
Coyote

[Kenneth The Poet]

Nice piece. I felt like I was part of the crowd at first, but then my uniqueness came to the fore.

[Geraldine]

Whoa! I loved this one. ^^ So interesting and while reading I'm having ideas about being invisible. Oh yeah. Very good write.

[Sarah Nicole Nadler]

i'm going to save this one as a favorite. you are really great, such imagery and perfect rendition of something that could be old and twice-baked, and turned it into something that just captures the mind and takes you in.

[Vivere ad mihi, mi Deus]

I like this. It is what most people have to do, make their own place in the world :) you have done well :) Good job.

[asdarkeyesclose]

a bit like a bird stretching its wings, i liked the image of 'a paradise of strangers' and the way this one broadened to the horizon. perfect!

[freelancejouster]

my only suggestion is one of comfort and not desperation, i would put a stanza break between ideas, just to give that much more emphasis.

otherwise, i do quite like this and i really enjoy the way you write. you've infused confusion and indecision and made the outcome still hopeful. brilliant.

[Luke Ritta]

very nice imagery...nice write.

[Dr Ayaz chandio]

great write...liked it.