I'd Like My Killer To Be At The Funeral

self-explaining, melancholy, truthful

I'd like my killer to be at the funeral

to sit in the front during the eulogy.

I'd like for him to be a pall bearer

to carry me to the place where I should rest.

Allow him to wipe away my mother's tears,

to shake my father's trembling hand.

Do not send him to trial or to jail.

Have him spend ten hours a day

sitting upon my grave; send him

to the heart of the forests, to the tops

of the mountains, to timberland meadows,

to see what he had taken from me.

After seasons, his heart will be impaled.

He will know then that he is a thief

far more than he is a murderer.

Add his name to my tombstone.

He'll find he died also that day.

Reviews

[Sarah]

This is perhaps one of the most powerful pieces I've read ever. o= The entire concept and sad, quiet way that it was written is heart-breaking and almost a little unnerving. Wonderful vivid description and a whole new look at revenge for the person who took your life away. I adore this more than words can explain. Great job. =)

[EvesDaughter]

This is an awesome poem - truly.
You chose a unique topic and
made it work for me - when I
finished reading, all I could do
was think, "wow." Oh, and thank
you so much for reviewing my
poetry as well. It brought me
here and that is a good thing :)

[Sr.phil]

nice write

[Steffi]

Very powerfuly piece.
"...send him
to the heart of the forests, to the tops
of the mountains, to timberland meadows,
to see what he had taken from me."

[J.F.Viramontes]

i like it good read and i love the idea of him being there to wach as your family crys and him takeing you to your grave damn that was harsh i wouldint have been able to handl it and the ten hours on your grave is to show him how many hours of your life you lost verry smart i liked it alot keep it up homie

J.F.viramontes

[lilain]

'A thief not a murder'... I very much like that. In the end, isn't murder an extreme form of stealing? Someone has stolen your chance to love the beauty of the earth... the chance to kiss and hug loved ones... the chance to channel your rightful energy from the omnipresent conscience.

Cool.

[robin]

Well done and great irony! You should try writing a response from his point of view. Pretty vigilante. Do you think there is a possibility of reward in vengeance or revenge? Keep on, keep it real. The "character" is well committed.

[oranges_melt]

oooo I really really love that! beautiful! keep writing!

[Precious Ambiguity]

Oh man that bothered me i liked it.
i cant believe you want him there but at the same time why not you guys would then have a history and then the fact that he dies at the end...PERFECT TWIST...


I THINK THERE IS TRUE SORROW HERE.