Requiem for Love

First poem on affection, so might not be up to standards. Also a hard topic for me to speak about but here it is anyways.

Your smile pierced me at first sight
Just painted on for the night
For your eyes held another tale
They longed for someone not to fail
A man to be there at your side
To which I promised I’d abide

We’d form a firm foundation
With each other’s validation
To build a house like no other
And with affection we’d smother
For your beauty shone in every way
And thus I wanted you to stay
We’d be happy in this home
Our life written in a tome

You are nothing less than perfect
We truly did connect
Now only I see this link
My actions changed how you think
You saw a tainted me
He was horrible I’ll agree
Deeming me worthless
Making this venture seem fruitless

But I see this house crumble
Hurting as I caused the tumble
No ones fault but my own
I have made you feel alone
I have failed you I know
And I’ve never felt this low
I will always cherish you
Whether you believe it’s true
I give all my love
I think the world of
You

Author's Note

Just tell me in general how do you feel about this poem.

Reviews

[michi]

It has good rhythm, you got your emotions across in a creative way. The rhyming was great.

[richy]

Be happy you created that from nothing. great.

[Nisreen]

Waw
I am sure if she heard you say these words
She would instantly forget anything bad that has happened

Beyond touching

[Declan]

Thank you
I like to think so too but that won't happen unfortunately. Though it is nice to hear you enjoyed it. I wasn't sure if I got what I was feeling across.