Awake

My statement and apology to you as fellow humans.

I see more than the eye has known

Given sight beyond sight

I abandon my throne

Ejected from the heavens

I burn my wings 

They don't comfort me

My senses, my mind, they betray me

I have fallen

The world I knew was only a lie bathed in gold

Awakening I see that it was all a show

A circus for the wealthy with no curtain call

Why do they treat us like useless trash?

Less than human we burn them like ash

Left to waste in a rotten world

But the stench is never smelt 

Covered up with lavender 

Peeling back the faces of those who laughed at us

Our leaders, our heroes, those who guide our lives

Only lived up to the high

Spread across a marble table a powdered white line

A few sniffs and the children are forgotten

Shackled and chained

We turn a blind eye

Caught up in greed we consume white lies

Just acknowledging the water will get your mind spilled

Split a few wigs to protect their pride

To hide the scars of the world

Is this what life was really meant to be?

Is this Eden? Samsara? Paradiso?

Let me tell you the secret

We are faceless people judging the faithless

Living in a dying world with no replay button

Squeezing on to the hope that someone will save us

While we all drown in the living infinite 

I don't need your peace or your troublesome antics 

I see the whole truth and what I stand for

If I could pour the world stage into a glass

It would melt like acid 

Burning every flag 

Mixing their colors to black

Please tell me you are listening

My final message to you as a person like me:

Don't let the world rot

It is our only cradle 

Our home

I'm sorry

Forgive me for being so blind

If only I could have seen the lies

Give me a chance to make it all right

Awaken

Author's Note

Leave your thoughts, reviews, whatever you feel like. Express yourself.

Reviews

[Thomas Lucas]

i really like it. the saying "My senses, my mind, they betray me" makes so much sense to me, as our mind always tries to describe everything, put some frames and restrictions. i also like the sentences about being blind and consuming lies as i think so many people act like zombi or being just automative

[Final-Karma]

I completely agree. People are blind and do not want to believe the truth. Thank you for reviewing this poem. I am glad you understand the troubles that we face.

[M]

Interesting. What is truth. According to the christian scriptures, Pilate said such words did he not. Oh, don't mind me. Just another deep thinker looking for answers to unknown questions. :)

[Riddhi]

I indeed liked this poem...The power of words you have used keeps the reader enchanted in your poem...I really liked your use of words and your powerful lines..I must say you are a really great writer...After reading this poem i feel like i can learn a lot from how you write poems...
Keep on writing and thanks for sharing
Riddhi

[Final-Karma]

Thank you so much! I hope you are moved to write more and continue to expand. Thank you again for your review!

[Nolo Segundo]

Your imagery is impressive, as is the depth of thought behind it. Your line starting 'If I could pour...' is magnificent-- might suggest a bit of proofreading, as I suspect you meant 'their colors' and in line 11 perhaps ' a circus for the wealthy'? I don't imagine you want anything to distract the reader from the innate power of your words- no true writer does.

[Final-Karma]

Thank you so much for pointing that out. I do need to proofread more. It's something I am working on. I am glad you enjoyed my work. Thank you again for the correction!

[AliceBarnes]

This poem went straight into my fave list as I just loved it from the first line. I am so, so sorry that I have taken so long to read and review this, but I promise to catch with with my read requests (I am really just trying to juggle read requests, updates for my story, and making sure I get college assignments done) so if I take a while, please do not feel that I am ignoring you, I love your writing. I really enjoyed this, the fallen angel aspects of it were particularly interesting and unique that made for a very interesting read. From the first line "I see more than the eye has known. Given sight beyond sight" I knew that this was going to be good. Just those first two lines were the most powerful that I have read all day. I really loved this poem, your works are always so beautifully written and each time I see a read request from you I just get really excited (that may seem super weird) but let me finish XD I love how much effort you put into each of your poems, and to me, each becomes better than the last. I also loved the line "We are faceless people judging the faithless" because that was just beautifully written, you truly are so talented.

[Final-Karma]

With all of your reviews you are so kind and I thank you for taking the time to always read my work! I'm so happy you enjoy them! I am slowly trying to improve over time and I am glad you notice the change. It equally makes me excited to see a read request from you and a review as I always know it will be pretty amazing. Thank you again for your advice, work, and review!

[AliceBarnes]

It's no problem, I love reading your works! That is so sweet! No, thank you for always reading and reviewing my work, sorry if there are too many read requests by the way, I got slightly carried away. Hehe. Thanks again and I very much look forward to reading more of your works.

[Wulfwaru]

It was rather inspiring, often times reminding me of Sirenia and Nightwish.

The lines: "Shackled and chained, We turn a blind eye, Caught up in greed we consume white lies."
We often forget to questions our surroundings and instead we shelter ourselves from the hard truth.

"Ejected from the heavens, I burn my wings, They don't comfort me, My senses, my mind, they betray me." Those lines remind me of the song "From the Pinnacle to the Pit," in which the chorus goes," You are cast out from the heavens to the ground, blackened fathers falling down."

Elegant, well thought, and beautiful in a morbid way. We often forget the truth because we simply don't want to hear or see it. It' too easy to swallow the juicy lies instead of putting in the effort to pursue the truth.

I'm definitely checking out your other writings. I doubt I'll disappointed either!

[Final-Karma]

What you reference is fairly interesting seeing as I am a big Ghost fan but I never thought of it from that way. It is very similar indeed. You are right though. One day our eyes have to open to the dirty truth that we swim in. Thank you so much for your reviews. They are really appreciated!

[Thepensiveplayer]

Amazing. It hard to remain blind once something opens up your mind. You feel compelled to execute a new purpose even though others may not understand it well. I feel like with all the issues in this world we still exist and our glass is half-full. I guess you poured your does of realism into me and I feel empowered because its energizing. keep up the work.

[Final-Karma]

I am so glad you understand. It honestly is hard to unsee what you have seen, but the enlightenment is refreshing. Thank you for reviewing my work. It really means a lot!