Time's Passing

A culmination of time.

If someone wrote a story about me

It would surely be a grand one

Schemes about life and chases

Moving from place to place

Anchoring my soul to the wind

If someone wrote a story about me

It would surely be a tragedy 

Full of despair and love

Chaos and loss 

Leaving my ship ashore

If someone wrote a story about me

It would surely be the last one

Worn out pages and broken spine

Dust settling on a forgotten soul

Something longed but never obtained 

I lose myself to the sway of the world

If someone wrote a story about me

It would surely be about us

Author's Note

What do you think? Good? Bad?

Reviews

[Saumya]

Life is but a ' Jigsaw Deluxe' for everyone who yearns peace and stability the most.All we need is to know the real characters who would fit in the story well & to get rid of those who aren't required at that time.l, and that indeed is an art.

People care, but nobody too much.And the worst part is, nothing that we adore last forever! Therefore we gotta learn to be stable, contented, and adapt with all that happens in and around us.L, because the more we expect, the least we get.The more we struggle, the more complicated things become.
That's exactly how life is! Unpredictable, and wierdly special in its own way..

We all experience sunsets and sunrises in our life, but all we need to know, is nothing remains constant, nor the sunset, nor the sunrise, and both are inevitable part of our lives :)

Thankyou for sharing this piece, and if you think life's dull and unrewarding just for you, lemme tell you, it's not just you, but we are all the same in many different ways :)
Hold on, think, rethink, and tell yourself, this too shall pass!😊

[Final-Karma]

Thank you so much. You are definitely right about life. It is a raging storm that never stops but has its moments of calm where you aren't getting so battered. This was an amazing review!

[Saumya]

You're most welcome 😊
Good luck with the new pages of your life! ✌

[Thepensiveplayer]

You certainly can summarize your life's experiences in one swoop. After all, writing is an excellent way for people to understand your mind. You sound like a person that's been through a lot like myself. I enjoy reading writing like yours because it reassures me that I'm not the only one with these feelings. Overall, I find your style appealing. Keep posting and performing.

[Nigel Newman]

I lose myself to the sway of the world .... how true. This reads very well. It draws the reader in. The whole 'if someone ... about me' just gets people thinking about their own situation. The aspirations and dreams. The cold look in the mirror. It's all there. The repeat of the main theme works well too. Very nice job!

Nigel

[Final-Karma]

That was definitely my aim. I want people to self reflect and to understand themselves more. Thank you so much for the review.

[Srchaud]

I like it because it is relateable. The truth of life is all of our stories have good and bad in them. We have that tragic story to share and one with boundless joy.
Life sometimes leaves us ragged and worn yet soaring free.

[AmateurWriter01]

This poem was amazing in so many different ways. Each of the stories could be tied together creating one beautiful trilogy. It was an amazing read and I enjoyed every second of it.

[Final-Karma]

This really means a lot to me. It makes me happy that you understood. Thank you so much! I hope you enjoy my future work.

[Metaphantom]

the mortality of time, the reality of perceptions of self and the thought of someones perception of your life. Very intriguing. interesting read. thank you, much appreciation! Namaste!

[Final-Karma]

Thank you so much. I am glad you enjoyed it. You understood the meaning perfectly.

[AliceBarnes]

This was amazing! I can't even tell you how much I loved this! It really got me thinking about my story, I don't mean that in a selfish way, but I truly value works that get me thinking about my own life or that I can relate to. My absolute favorite line was "If someone wrote a story about me
It would surely be a tragedy Full of despair and love Chaos and loss" it was so beautifully written and it all just flowed so nicely. This was very well written, I can't spot any mistakes which is very impressive and it flowed very smoothly. This is an absolute gem and I loved every minute of it. I will be definitely adding this to my favorites list to re-read in the future.

[Final-Karma]

Thank you so much! You're reviews are always amazing. I want my writing to make you think in that sense. I invoke emotions and to search for something. I equally enjoy your work just as much! You are so kind. Thank you so much for your review.

[Karma Rabgay]

Yah, I can see the time is passing in astronomical ways ..

[Final-Karma]

Thank you so much. That was the goal

[nefalnumair]

"Moving from place to place
Anchoring my soul to the wind" This is lovely. Good piece of writing. I feel you can add something to the last stanza but that is just an opinion. :)
I would appreciate if you review my writing as well.

[Final-Karma]

Thank you so much! I kind of left the end open on purpose just to leave room for thought. I will definitely take a look at your work and leave reviews! Thank you again!

[nefalnumair]

Good piece of writing. :) Please do take a look and give me suggestions, im new to this website.