STOP

STOP

A Poem by EileenMarie
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I don't know why I feel so down

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STOP

I don’t know

I don’t know why I feel so down

I don’t know why down is how I feel

STOP

I am suffering

I am hiding behind the smile

I am distressed that it is hidden

STOP

I want to be euphoric

I want to be gratified

I want to relax

STOP

I tell the voices to STOP

I tell myself I am okay

I tell myself don’t feel bad

STOP

I will be positive

I will be empowered

I will be serene

START LIVING

© 2012 EileenMarie


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I think you have the making of an excellent spoken word piece.
You could tighten it up by using some stronger verbs. likeeee for example:
instead of "I am mad" it could be something like "I am infuriated." Obviously that word doesnt fit as well, but I'm just making an example=). And I'm still super tired haha;D.
But all in all it is an excellent piece.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

EileenMarie

12 Years Ago

I changed it up a bit, thanks!!



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I think you have the making of an excellent spoken word piece.
You could tighten it up by using some stronger verbs. likeeee for example:
instead of "I am mad" it could be something like "I am infuriated." Obviously that word doesnt fit as well, but I'm just making an example=). And I'm still super tired haha;D.
But all in all it is an excellent piece.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

EileenMarie

12 Years Ago

I changed it up a bit, thanks!!
Some days it helps to write.......

Please review.....thanks!

Posted 12 Years Ago



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