Aching with Depression

Living through the blues

Despair is lurking all around me

No sunny day can bring back joy

All beauty is masked with pain

Hopelessness fills the air

Deep sorrow stays strong

Sadness wins

For now

Hurt

Author's Note

Name change only

Reviews

[dan]

EileenMarie, I saw that you had reviewed one of my poems, so I made a visit over to your page to review one of yours. When I noticed the title of this write I was immediately curious, as I am bipolar myself. "Sadness wins for now...Hurt," is a line with which I can certainly identify. The social stigmas associated with depression, bipolar disorder and other behavioral health conditions are often not admitted to by those it affects; thank you for your honesty and the way you've expressed it. take care...dan

[EileenMarie]

Dan.. I just saw this. Thank you for your review.. I hope it somewhat helped :)

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Nice description of how dull life can bee when you are dealing with depression. It does hurt to have depression as you said a the one. Short but powerful piece. N.

[EileenMarie]

Again thanks for reading! I'm glad you liked it :)

[Bacchus]

I like the line Deep sorrow stays strong
and like the last four lines.

Almost can use this a symptom list rather than a navigation tool.

[EileenMarie]

ummm you make a good argument on the title. I like that you pointed that out! Thanks :)

[Bacchus]

Check out my Back for Rainbow Jell-O poem- it talk about depression too.

[Annie Gryphon]

I don't like so much poems about depression because it honors the depression, sets a crown on its ugly face and it cries so much for attention. But i must admit you've done it well. You keep it simple and the form underlines the message. It goes down down down, as dirty water into a sink. I don't know you but hope you're feeling better. (Don't care so much about family)

[EileenMarie]

Thank you Annie. I'm conquering the depression & should write about joy more often. Writing helps get me out of my head so that's where I was .. I appreciate your honestly!! Not sure what you mean about not caring so much about family?

[Chris]

so many, many feel their way through the dark... you touch it well.

[EileenMarie]

Thank you Chris! I appreciate you reading my poetry. I like this style, Nonnet, it is easy for me to get my feelings out this way.

[Chris]

some styles and forms work well with a mind's tears...

[EileenMarie]

Divorce spiral is most of my poetry ......... I am through the dark, now if I can learn to express my happiness in my poetry it would be the next breakthrough!

[Chris]

Take your time and let your eyes smile as they will... real heart always finds its way.

[EileenMarie]

I don't usually ask people to read my work but I want to share my poem Smile with you. I think you will understand it well. Please look it up.

[Chris]

but of course... anytime

[SuspectGray]

I think we all go thru times of depression. I see hope in your poem. Acknowledging our pain goes a long way toward healing

[EileenMarie]

Thank you! I appreciate you taking the the time to read & review!

[MOON]

Poignant well expressed write.

[EileenMarie]

Thank you! That means a lot!

[EileenMarie]

Constructive criticism wanted!