Blue Eyes

Blue was the color of desire to me

Likewise blue eyes meant serene

Until I met you

Evil that lives within you

Execrable is how you treat us

Your motives are clearly seen

Everything you do marked by jealously

Suffering soul that you are to me 

Reviews

[Bare trees]

You wrote this in a way that was seamless and capable of bringing out the contrast in your prior idea of what blue represented. Jealousy is always destructive in any relationship.

Nice writing.

[EileenMarie]

Yes it is... Thanks for the review :)

[Bare trees]

No problem Eileen.

[Emily Paige]

this was great! I have one suggestion and that's since it's about blue eyes why don't you make the letters that spell out blue eyes blue.

[EileenMarie]

Good Point!! I'll do that now :)

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

Great suggestion!

[Anthony Q Armstrong]

That was, to sum it up, one of the best things I have ever read.

100/100

[EileenMarie]

Wow thank you so much!

[Marie]

I thought red was the colour of desire...I'm sorry that such a lovely colour as blue was spoiled by evil...

[EileenMarie]

to me blue eyes are the color most desired.... yet I have 3 people with blue eyes that inflict pain on many people at many levels..... I am a lucky person in so many other ways it just seems I have had my share of people with jealousy that is out of control....

[afra]

beautiful and deep ...great write

[EileenMarie]

Thank you!