Seconds to this moment

time stood still for me it never froze unwillingly unmoving past is cruel dishonour for time is vulgar ritual -Dedicated to Raven

time is an incorrigible machine  

relentless designs in the making 

I've just got to know where I'm standing 

its unshakable but within 

I'm a very feeble thing 

brooding brooding 

get me out of this thing 

washed away by the coincidence 

opportunity that never makes sense 

eating into my existence 

rapid breathing was a ritual in the past 

rapid breathing was a ritual in the past 

it's just the edge of occurrence 

precincts of prevalence

up ahead is incidence constantly new rituals

every moment just tastes staler 

oh hear me it's the coming of disaster 

oh hold me it's the birth of a whole new order 

pray the wheels for mercy 

to grind on or pause 

it's a coffin of opportunity 

harness or mourn the loss

gritted teeth and clenched fists 

senses dire and a quick prayer 

waiting for the electrons in the wire 

rapid breathing was a ritual of the past 

Author's Note

this poem dawned on me seconds before I started writing it

Reviews

[MuSe Ampoule]

Interesting and intelligent piece you have here. It deserves to be read slowly to soak in all the meanings. What I get from this is a disdain for current "unconsciousness" by our kind but then fretting over what is to come. It makes you think...if it's so bad now what's on the horizon. "its a coffin of opportunity
gritted teeth and clenched fists"

I like the repetition of "rapid breathing was a ritual of the past". A ritual for what I wonder? An ecstatic expression...a way to tap into something greater to foresee what's coming?

Very thoughtful piece.

[HopelesslyDevoted]

This is one of those poems that could have many different interpretations depending on the reader. i really enjoyed this. its deep, thought provoking, powerful, and has a great rhythm to it. please send me more read requests when you write new poems, your very talented. i enjoy your writing immensly :)

[Effector Prime]

thanks :) you're sweet :)

[SpokenWord]

In a way I see many parts of your poem through my own interpretation which maybe different than what was intended. I think many of us worry about a future that we have little control over and I hear this in the poem with the rapid breathing clintched fist and so on. One thing is for sure we don't know if the NWO will be good or bad we assume bad from the 1984 book and movie. Change is hard for any one and change of a nation is hard for every one imagine this on a level of the world changing. Your poem is wonderful enjoyed the read.

[Effector Prime]

lol yeah :) if only we can step on the reigns, even apply the brakes in the least :) and thank you for the kind words my friend :)

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. i'm grateful i am alive and have time ... there's stuff i need to do ... your poem is amazingly well written ...

[Effector Prime]

thank you so much :)