photon

inspired by Elisa Laura; dedicated to Stephen Hawking

she was forged in a hot bed

she lays on the surface

accumulating power

growing

what's holding me down

what's revving me up

millions of miles an hour

in a second

the heat

the impatience

there's something she does to the darkness

something she does to the darkness

riding on a photon is eerie

unclasping the seatbelts has broken me

i scare the living lights out of anything into a charred silhouette behind it

Reviews

[Great Aunt Astri]

Effector, I am not sure I completely understand this poem. Was it a lost love you refer to when you 'unclasped the seatbelt.'?' And was it the lost love that made you feel you were riding on a photon? (Lovely image) Or is it your own emotions? The poem does read very well and 'does something' to the imagination. Well written.

[Effector Prime]

this poem is no metaphor. it's a function of reality.. I described what I saw if I were to sit on top of a supercharged photon (but hey, supercharged they all are.. lol) like the eminent physicist Stephen Hawking..

unclasping the seatbelts.. hmm that was an interesting line to write.. you know, if you were riding a photon, more than an eternity zooms past you in seconds.. imagine you having to forego that beauty? forsake the thrill of that trip? reach the end of that ride? while I climb out of the photon (after unclasping the belts) the walls of my heart give in to sorrow..

this poem could mean many things, from science to philosophy to love to girls.. this could defeat the purpose that it's no metaphor.. but like I said, this poem could have more than 1 meaning.. but It was an inspiration by Elisa Laura (featured) :) many thanks for the terrific review Astri : )

[Great Aunt Astri]

That makes sense, now that you have explained it. Thank you very much for putting me in the picture. A really dynamic poem. Keep writing.

[Effector Prime]

thank you very much dear Astri :)

[sakshi arora]

its a really nice piece especially the last stanza (USP) :) loved it

[Effector Prime]

thank yous a mighty lot matey : )

[Effector Prime]

what's USP please por favor? :)

[sakshi arora]

usp unique selling pont :)

[Effector Prime]

:) cheers!

[AYVID N]

Wow!

"there's something she does to the darkness
something she does to the darkness"

I loved these lines, very musical and inspiring!

[Effector Prime]

wow :) thank you my friend! :) rock on!

[AYVID N]

You are most welcome :)
Much enjoyed!

[Saddam]

I am not so good in physics,( smile ) But like to read fictions. I love it. Well dedicated and inspired. I'm also a big fan of Laura.

[Effector Prime]

you must be indeed :) so am I.. an immortalised fan.. she's the coolest writer :)
fiction to me is more real than my love for physics. I believe physics is inspired through imagination rather than the reverse. thanks immensely for your sweet and awesome review my friend :)

Aw you two are too much!!!! ;)

[Effector Prime]

join us then! 3 much BAHA! :)

[Saddam]

Three are better than two, come along for walk.

[Effector Prime]

a walk to remember ay :)

[Saddam]

Fabulous....

Haha love to you my sweet friends.... I just got back from my long road adventures, and laugh here... you two are so appreciated! -x- :)

[Effector Prime]

welcome back! what tidings do you bring? lol and thank you :)

Thank you so much... lol.... well, you shall see... :P

[Effector Prime]

likewise :) hope you have a great week! :)

[Effector Prime]

For once and a while the personage felt so alive riding a true same frequence of wavelength, ;) Maths, in the Sky high, and light, that's reflecting her darkness... (There where shadows, and shades to grow...). And the fuel seemed not to burn out, but past and future were colliding, in your beautiful ending, surreal, but real, and fantastically spelled out bud! :) well done!!

- Elisa

[Effector Prime]

thank you thank you so very much my friend :) this was the first time ever that I wrote a song with only equations in my head.. just fundamentals.. and no emotions.. just the inspiration you wrought in me and my admiration for stephen hawking.. he was the first person ever to imagine sitting on a photon.. that's how he was thought to think, imagine and derive.. thank you very very much :)

So interesting yes, I know all you say. And the other side is calling or has called your door... very beautiful, plus inspiring, you are too! You are welcome buddy.... cheers -x-

[Effector Prime]

likewise :)