Sun son

there was once this little boy

who loved the sun by far

running, laughing,playing and living

cos he liked the boy

sharing memories and thoughts to a far away being

But darkness filled the boy's soul

and there's no cure for it

and certainly it wasn't the sun's problem

so everything fell apart

And so the stars took over

especially the dark star

who filled many holes in his life

she taught him to wonder at night

to enjoy life simply without light

and to swim in the water without fear or might

But there was a need the star couldn't give him

Is that only the sun could warm him up without doing much

That was the detail

So when he woke up one day

he was gone

and so tears fell to the grass

the boy looked up

and let out a sigh.

Reviews

[Brandon]

I'm not sure if it was intended or not, but poetry is pretty open to interpretation, so here goes: it seemed to be about losing your first love. Or favorite love anyway. The boy was in love with the Sun, but the boy decides for whatever reason to move on. He turns to the stars and is pacified by them for a time, always in the back of his mind hungering for the Sun. The Dark Star tries her best to replace the Sun...but in the end...the boy looks to the heavens and sighs for his lost love.
Anyway, just my take on it. I really enjoyed it!

[Wandering Violet]

That's thought provoking.

so sad

[RienKelsoCinema]

Astonishing, to say the least. I love the massive detail you have used.