Expressed Milk

Comic poem about part of my everyday life, originally on AP and unusually for me not written for a contest....just trying to see how this works

Speeding along on a three am run to Tesco Express,
only wearing jogging bottoms, crocs and a vest,
radio two's whispering Bob Harris seems over loud,
travelling empty streets devoid of the usual crowd.

Security guard slowly lowers his cuddly comic book,
scans this scruffy Herbert with an appraising look,
his thoughts obvious, he's far too fat to be on drugs,
lack of facial tattoo's separate him from the local thugs.

So this wrecked, hen pecked,
once mother's pride searches for bread and cheese,
all bloodshot night workers eyes and threadbare knees,
looking such a tit in his sad search for Welsh rarebit,
which only with Lea and Perrins brings true culinary merit.

Saucy checkout girl smiles, goodies into carrier bag piles,
the milk of human kindness pours down the aisles,
both members of staff quite rightly do a double-think,
someone better clear that up before it begins to stink.

Reviews

[ImagineItAll]

Well that was fun :-) Man, I hate crocs though! Love the last stanza and how the poem leads up to it.

[Nobody]

Enjoyable story, the moment well captured, with humour and precision. The milk is everywhere, though a lot better unpasteurised in my humble opinion.

[annie minus]

This is great Ed, you've captured an everyday scene effortlessly and with finesse, it kept me drawn in throughout until that clever ending. (I love Welsh rarebit - yum)

[teddybard]

Nothings right without Lea & Perrins ,although these days I use Reggae Reggae
sce as well,Super poem theme best of luck
Roger

[Verslayer]

*haha*....Ed? You have really told the tale well. You have an in-built knack of making effective poetry out of seemingly banal everyday life. I wish I could do that but when I go to Morrisons I come out empty walleted not full-mined of poetry *glum*...great poem mate!
Rob~

[brandubh]

Nice images Ed, did you tie your feet to your pet crocodiles - I've told you before about that, I'll report you to the RSPCA :)

[Peggy Gildon]

So that's what three am looks like... It's been a while since I made a run like that. Loved the imagery. Enjoyed the read. God bless.

[Daytonight]

Very cute. Your descriptions had me picturing this scene in my mind. Great rhyme and flow. Keep on penning.