Skyfall

She keeps calling as the sky keeps falling...

My addictions are explicit  

My happiness now a misfit 

Misery I'm bound to solicit  

Why does she always visit 

My soul now feels evicted 

To darkness I am addicted 

How could this be mended 

Everything is now conflicted 

How will this all end for me 

Will she ever let me be free 

Only in due time we will see 

I need to go, just let me be

 ... 

Stop your calls out to me 

Your gaze just enslaves me 

As any other time you win 

I pick you up and give in 

Light you until you're warm 

Fill a syringe, put you in my arm 

The high gets better each time 

I love you forever my perfect dime 

Reviews

[Kkay]

Addictions are consuming. Though you want out the addiction is so compelling. You know the terms and choose to stay. Someone recently told me that her husband was a drug. It was like shooting him in her arm and then going, "Aaaahhhh." It was during a difficult time. You blame your addiction instead of yourself.

[AaronFreitas]

This is an awesome write buddy... good work!

[Jack Kennedy]

Thank you for dropping the review. Appreciate it

[Riley Justine]

The flow to this is amazing. Awesome job here.
It all ties together so well and the rhyming scheme is flawless.

~Ri

[Jack Kennedy]

Ah thank you, i appreciate it fully. Thanks again

[NoelHC]

Well rhymed, and well written. I also wonder if this is about drugs or about a woman, both can be just as addictive, and both can be dangerous.

I noticed "Your gaze just enslave me" that should be enslaves

Well done.

[Jack Kennedy]

Good eye with the enslaves one!!! I didn't notice i left off the s.
also thanks for stopping by and reviewing

[stars are far]

well that was very smart write since every reader can look at it in his own perspective, either as a lover or as a drug addict, so that was very well written, and the rhyme you used here was well penned. great work Jack :D

[Saddam]

Effectively write dear. But a very nice read dear.

[Gabby Nieves]

can't tell if this is about a girl or drugs, either way, s**t was good.

[Jack Kennedy]

Whichever one you prefer, thanks for reviewing! I appreciate it to the fullest.

[Jennie Baron]

Wow, an amazing poem, Jack. I love the rhyme scheme and the metaphor of love/obsession as an addiction. Well done! Keep writing that great poetry. Oh, and thanks for the mention in your profile!

[Jack Kennedy]

Thank you for the review and kind words. Also You're welcome!!

[Ana B.]

oh man, what a tantalizing write :) Beautiful and dark. A perfect combination. Great job Jack :)

[Jack Kennedy]

Thank you for reviewing! Means alot to me

[Kasey Miriam]

With this piece I feel you've grown very much. This is very well written and I didn't see anything I would change

[Jack Kennedy]

I'm glad you feel that way and also i thank you very much for the review

[Kasey Miriam]

You are very welcome Jack