Strung Along

Hate it or Love it

Every night seven days a week

He uses me to put on a show

For the audience over again

Shows seem like an eternity

The crowd chants and laugh

At the terrible jokes and gags 

His name in lights, mine's not

He takes all the credit and fame

I have to sit and take a backseat

He says he's grateful for --- them

Never for me! 

Just them he says "only you all".

I hate the audience and I hate him

He can't do the show without me

But everyone and him forgets that

He had several replacements

Numerous third parties but none

Could do what I've done and no

One will ever come close to me

Or my talent!

He sit on stage and I sit on his lap

We tell jokes that makes them

Laugh then when it's over I have 

To go back inside my case 

While he celebrates my hard work

Tonight is the night though 

I'm gonna take over the show!

Just waiting in my case for the

Perfect opportunity then he is all

Mine and we will finally see who is

The Dummy now! 

Author's Note

Long overdue for a poem! This is different to me for some reason, just the way it's written.

Reviews

[NoelHC]

Puppetry is a difficult skill to master, so is poetry. It seems you are well on your way to that with this poem. I agree with the ladies, who are far better at poems than I ever hope to be, just what is it you mean with "But everyone and him forgets him" ?

[Jack Kennedy]

Thank you for the review and I fixed the line

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

I like the idea of this poem. Nicely penned. :)

[Kasey Miriam]

Great write Jack! I enjoyed this poem

[TL Boehm]

yup. I for some reason have deep empathy for the puppet. This poem made sense to me. Well done.

[Jack Kennedy]

Thank you! I'm glad it was understandable.

[Dandelion]

Where to start??
For winning my thriller contest, I'm reviewing your work, so here it is:

As I already told you, this poem stands out for it's originality and element of surprise: the dummy. First off, I was reading this without realizing much who was the person talking, but the further I read, the more it became evident, it's a puppet that wants revenge for being used in return of no fame! Evidently, he has had enough and the last paragraph gave me chills. I really like the way you wrote this piece and it is well put in context. Flawless job and thanks for sharing!

[Jack Kennedy]

Thank you for likeing it and reviewing and winning your contest!! Its always a pleasure shariing!! I thank you very much!! Take Care!

[Dandelion]

You're welcone. Take care as well :)

[Stefanie Holmes]

I agree with the other reviews about the greatness behind this concept. I thought the piece was very creative and unique.

~Stefanie

[Jack Kennedy]

Thank you for that, nice to see that someone thinks so! Glad dyou enjoyed the piece

[MeathooksMcGee]

Hey Jack,

Listen, I read in your, "About the author" section that you want to be the greatest writer of all time, it's with that statement that I'm going to level with you. The idea for the poem is novel and unique and for that I congratulate you. However, you have a lot of work to do. Personally This is one of the worst poems I've ever read.

I don't know if you thought that the lack of punctuation would be a unique literary tool, but if so, it doesn't work. Your sentence structure is loose and incomplete leading to thoughts not being properly conveyed.

I don't know how well read you are but I would pray that you would double your current reading and until your abilities increase I would stick to writing what you know.

Jack, there is a book called The Outliers by Malcom Gladwell, in it the author says that it takes at least 10,000 hours of practice before any skill can be mastered, start practicing and take a look at the book if you have time.

I look forward to the day when you're published and I have to eat my words. Good luck kid.

[Jack Kennedy]

Thanks for the words in all honesty and the book suggestion! The worst ever though?

[MeathooksMcGee]

In my opinion and you know what they about options...

Like a******s, everyone has one.

[Jack Kennedy]

I respect your opinion, it'll only help me hopefully

[MeathooksMcGee]

I feel kinda bad kid... When it comes down too it, don't ever give up writing but you have got to work REALLY HARD. Just keep going.

[Symphonic_Sunflowers]

I liked it :) when i realised it was about a puppet, i was waiting for something really evil to happen to the puppet master...
I watch too many horror stories, me thinks :p

[Jack Kennedy]

That's great to say because it leaves you guessing on what happens next I hope! Thanks for reading and reviewing

[maria ( rose)]

you expressed this so well Jack. You've come along way. Great Job!!
maria rose♥

[Jack Kennedy]

Thank you for that! I really appreciate it

[maria ( rose)]

your welcome:))xx

[A Soap Mess Stories]

Sounds like "revenge of the dummy"--good write....

[Jack Kennedy]

Thank you! Glad to read your review