Predator Vs. Prey

Written in the same style as 'Together At Last'

Prey 

Running 

Tripping 

Falling

Crawling

Staggering

Predator

Racing

Chasing 

Embracing

Tasting

Preying

Result

The Predator wins

The prey's afterlife begins

And the cycle starts all over again

                 

                                                               Bonus Poem:

                                                          "Florette Style Poem"

                                                   Rain falls; the thunder brews

                                                    The storm we must pursue

Author's Note

Okay I for one thinks the bonus is a hidden gem and outshines the main attraction but that's my opinion! The main attraction was written a while ago but I don't too much care for it but you might! Also the bonus was originally on 'Diverse' but it got cut from the final product! There are five or seven others that were cut but will be included as bonuses in future works!

Well hope you all enjoy!! Take Care

Reviews

[IceWinifredd]

Very, very true. In fact, when I finished this poem, I made me think of humans hunting each other other then animals. Weird, huh? This is a very well-written poem. It's short, but I LOVE how it give my heart a little surge of adrenaline. Great work my friend!

[Jack Kennedy]

Thanks for the review! I'm glad you saw it as humans as it was to be that way :) thanks for stopping by!

[Jack Kennedy]

classic.. driven.. to the point that brings a bigger message.. well done..
The bonus? hmmmm well.. It is very very good but I don't think it out shadows the first one.. The first one carries me through the tall grass, the breathing the racing hearts of both and the final prayers...

[Jack Kennedy]

Thank you my opinion on that has changed since I wrote that and I have to say I don't too Mich care for the bonus as I did when I first wrote it. Thank you again for the review

[Trish Destiny]

Wow, this is so simply amazing! I love the rhythmic flow of this piece, that's so menacingly engaging and wonderfully written. Good Job!

[Jack Kennedy]

Thank you and I'm sorry for the very late response

[TL Boehm]

I think i like them both - the cyclical predator versus prey is a nice offset for the other piece.

[Ana B.]

Enchating as ever mr Kennedy :) thank God the circle of life flows in eternity....how do you find yourself in this equation? because i'm still guessing about me....

[Jack Kennedy]

To answer your question, I don't know. I never thought about it but I thank you for the review!

[Kitten]

Perfect and gorgeous rhyming to describe the nature of prey and predator. A short and sweet amazing read. Marvelous work Mister Kennedy! *applause*

~ Kitten

[Jack Kennedy]

Why thank you very much miss kitten!

[Kitten]

A pleasure mister Kennedy :)

[erika]

It kind of reminds me of cat/rat thing.
Have 2 new piece up.

[kenya smith]

The poem makes me imagine animals hunting each other. Like, a wolf, hunting a hare. I really liked it.

[Jack Kennedy]

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing! Glad you stopped by :)

[kenya smith]

you're welcome :)

[Stefanie Holmes]

The circle of life... Well done with this piece Jack!

~Stefanie

[Jack Kennedy]

Thank you very much!

[Ambra Celeste]

Reunited at least but not in the most romantic way...dark and cruel reality.

[Susie]

I like the bluntness in this! You capture the intensity perfectly, without any being LOST in too many words. I like!

[Jack Kennedy]

Thank you! Glad you liked :)