Draft Day

The Motion

              

On the twenty second of may,

For me is a certain draft day

Drafted to a land of uncertainty

This fact alone just worries me

Shipped out with a lost mind

All of us lined up to be set 'free'

What will ever happen to me

Must I be drafted in the league

Will I end up like others before me

Heartless, miserable and alone

Hopeless, detestable and single

Who knows, I'll find out in time

On the twenty second of may

I will be on the stage waiting,

Waiting to be finally drafted,

Drafted to a land of uncertainty

Author's Note

I graduate high school tomorrow 5/22/14 and these are my thoughts on it...

Reviews

[Wynter Ignatius]

As I stepped from the threshold of childhood to that of a young man so many years ago I too took the time in stride, questioning life like do now. I still hope I will be half the man I want to be but that like many things is a process of time and effort.

Kudos man and keep it up.

[Jack Kennedy]

I certainly will and thank you for stopping by!

[Wynter Ignatius]

Yeah, I'm playing catch-up with my requests - three digits is a bit much to be in the red.

[Jack Kennedy]

Wow three digits? That's gonna be a heavy duty I must say but good luck with it, I'm sure it'll be fine

[Wynter Ignatius]

Just feel behind due to various things and want to catch up a bit. I don't request myself often as I would rather people discover my stuff on their own time but I'm the type that will always take a look when requested; can't go against my nature after all.

[Ana B.]

Land of uncertainty.......i like it! I'm just more than sure you'll be drafted into a land of dreams and fantasms and your story is just beginning :)

[Jack Kennedy]

Thank you so much :) I'm glad you liked the poem!

[Saddam]

Shipped out with a lost mind
All of us lined up to be set 'free'
What will ever happen to me
Must I be drafted in the league.

Well imaged and beautiful created poetry.

[Jack Kennedy]

Thank You!

[jamiereneeangel]

I very much like how you ponder a specific date and encapsulate such heavy things within it. Congratulations for your poem and your degree

[Jack Kennedy]

Thanks for the review!

[MsJewel]

Congratulations! This is a big step!

:) Julie

[Jack Kennedy]

Thank you kindly :)

[just Penny]

Congratulations on this pivotal moment in your life. I like the theme of "drafting into uncertainty", which is true, but an adventure too :) Best wishes, Penny

[Jack Kennedy]

Thank you for the wishes and review :)

[Stephanie M]

Nicely written. I can sense the desperation of being kept in limbo, waiting for an uncertain future.

[Jack Kennedy]

Thank you very much!

[Arrinae]

Congratulations on graduating! You need to know, that your life is now 100% in your own hands. It will be what you make of it. Good luck and welcome to the real world.

[Jack Kennedy]

Thanks for the review and thanks for the welcome!

[Ambra Celeste]

Jack congratulation on this special day (I believe it is), the fear of uncertainty is felt through your poem. Be happy of your success. :)

[Jack Kennedy]

Thank you very much and thanks for reading! I really appreciate it!

[NoelHC]

Best wishes on graduating. The poem is well written, and really expresses that uncertainty facing all seniors at this time of year.

[Jack Kennedy]

Thank you it was definitely a different experience for me.

[Jennie Baron]

Hey, congratulations, Jack! You are actually in the midst of an amazing time, one that is so full of promise and optimism and also uncertainty. Best of luck; make the most of it. This expresses it so well, too. Using the phrase of being "drafted" brings a perspective that never occurred to me, but it's apt.