"Lost"

I didn't like this one very much but you might

What happened to you

All weak and frail

You were so beautiful

Now you're a tragic tale

I warned you about them

They still consumed you

What a terrible shame that is

What a tremendous pain this is

You waste away on the corners,

As you Fiend for a quick fix

I'm ashamed of you 

I'm ashamed of your problem

But I can't pass judgement

If I was there for you back then 

It would be very different

I can obviously see that,

Needles poison your arms

Addiction rapes your thoughts

It's so sad in every way possible

It's your life so live it how you want

...

Author's Note

Love it or hate it... There is no meter in the poem, not a rhyming poem. Just a poem I guess...

Reviews

[Margo Seuss]

Oh, good, free verse! Now I don't have to blabber on about ryhme patterns and syntax and that boring jargon. Pure emotion is the most beautiful to look at on paper! I love it because I can feel the emotion!! (No matter how hard I try I still feel)! I love this. I can see a friend ranting this poem to their addicted friend in a frenzy of drama! I just have one suggestion to perhaps add to the drama. Perhaps if you put a space before your repetative lines. Like between 'They still consumed..." and "What a terrible shame.." Also, a space before the last line could add just a titch more drama too.

[Jack Kennedy]

Cool idea... Thanks for the advice and review.

[AYVID N]

Addiction of any kind has a devilish, a satanic power to grip our core and consume our life. No warning, no counselling, no surveillance works and it eats away the victim's bones. Thank you for sharing this hard hitting and realistic poem with us.

[Deuces]

Very painful tale. It's hard to love for someone and care when they are destroying themselves. I can feel the anger, love and resentment in this. Nice piece.

[Jack Kennedy]

Thanks for the review. Much appreciated!

[Saddam]

Needles poison your arms
Addiction rapes your thoughts
It's so sad in every way possible
It's your life so live it how you want,

Very beautiful poetry is here. I like that one.

[Jack Kennedy]

Thanks for the feedback. Glad you liked it

[Kasey Miriam]

its a great free verse. Very much depth in emotion. Great job

[Jack Kennedy]

Thanks very much for the review. :) I'm glad it's being liked because I was going to just delete it. That would've been a mistake...

[Cory Barrett]

There is a lot of unfulfilled pain in these lines. Shame, is the most underrated emotion of all time. It's a killer.

[Jack Kennedy]

It is. Thanks for the review

[Honey-Bee]

I have seen this to much in real life and I hate the drug and life these people live. I like the poem because people it is so true that addiction rapes your thoughts. Did you see my poem on She fixed to be a heroine? Thanks for sharing!

[Jack Kennedy]

Thanks for the review and I don't know if I did or not but I will right now.

[Trenton Colburn]

i can relate to this. just about every line, and every word. you are amazing at expressing emotion like this!

[Jack Kennedy]

Thanks for the review. Much appreciated! :)

[Jack Kennedy]

And thanks for the compliment. :)

[Ren Grace]

I thought it was hauntingly beautiful

[Jack Kennedy]

Thank you. this took forever to write...

[Ren Grace]

well it was worth all the time you spent :)

[maria ( rose)]

It's a sad way of life for some people, addiction doesn't ease no pain. Sad story but you expressed it well.
maria rose

[Jack Kennedy]

Thanks for the feedback. It's greatly appreciated!

[maria ( rose)]

any time my friend:)