The Real HER

Love it or Hate it...

I want Her

The Real Her

I want the best of Her

Even the worst of Her

I'll give everything and more to Her

When I see the world, I see Her

When I'm happy I only think of Her

If I need inspiration I think of Her

If I need someone to call it'll be Her

I want to go deep inside of Her

I want to be in the soul of Her

I'll spend eternity & more with Her

Forever after just me and Her

Glad I found Her,

THE REAL HER

Author's Note

I expanded this one by like three extra bars...

Reviews

[BlackRose]

Fab piece. What can I say. One part I might change is, 'I hope I'm in the soul of Her.' I would say instead, the way it's said seems out of place with the rest, but maybe something as, 'I long to be deep in the soul of her. The rest is great! :o)

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[Jennie Baron]

One of my very, very favorites of yours so far, Jack (as anyone could guess from my work, I suppose). It shows a knowledge of love beyond your years. The repetition especially is quite effective. Splendid!

[Jack Kennedy]

I would have to say this one and Together At Last are fighting for the throne as my best poem I've written but R A I N is definitely a close third to them. Thanks for the review and I'm thrilled you liked it!!!

[TheAllegorist]

Very sweet. Admittedly I'm not as informed on poetry critique, but this seems solidly formed, though the "beat," as it were, seems just a syllable or so off in places. Like it, all in all.

[Jack Kennedy]

Thanks for the review and I hope this leads you into my other works. Thanks again!

[TheSearcher]

repeatable, ironic(in someway) and very straight. It's good to love that never have loved at all.~
:)

[Sarah Redigan]

So much longing in your words...

[Carl Drake Barnard]

i found this way open but I like it for its simplicity :) Good wright man :)

[Hessy]

nice poem,you've explained how deep in love you are wither although will change this and instead write " and hope am in the soul of her"

[Britt Nicole]

I love it! Who's Her??? Lol.

[Jen Yarrington]

Love it, for sure. You want everything - not just sex, not just friendship, you want all of her

[Jack Kennedy]

Thanks for your feedback and I hope you find your way to my other works... Thanks again!!!