The Real HER

Love it or Hate it...

I want Her

The Real Her

I want the best of Her

Even the worst of Her

I'll give everything and more to Her

When I see the world, I see Her

When I'm happy I only think of Her

If I need inspiration I think of Her

If I need someone to call it'll be Her

I want to go deep inside of Her

I want to be in the soul of Her

I'll spend eternity & more with Her

Forever after just me and Her

Glad I found Her,

THE REAL HER

Author's Note

I expanded this one by like three extra bars...

Reviews

[BlackRose]

Fab piece. What can I say. One part I might change is, 'I hope I'm in the soul of Her.' I would say instead, the way it's said seems out of place with the rest, but maybe something as, 'I long to be deep in the soul of her. The rest is great! :o)

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[Ambra Celeste]

This is my favourite (UK English). The first thing I think when I read this poem is that you only have eyes for Her, nobody else...

[Jack Kennedy]

Thanks for the review! Take Care

[Mila]

Very nice! I'm really becoming a fan of your work! Very romantic, charming and real.
One thing I'd like to maybe suggest is to make sure that you use commas properly. Some phrases needed them such as "If I need someone to call, it'll be Her". Perhaps reading it aloud to yourself can help you figure out where they go. And avoid using symbols such as "&" in your poetry; its all about the words, my friend! :)
As always, I thoroughly enjoy reading your work; great job! :) I hope you keep on with it, you have a great talent that's hard to come by!

[Taylor_McCutcheon]

This is real love. Nice job :)

[Megan Simpson]

The only thing I would change about this would be replacing "even" with "and" in line four. But it's a truly lovely piece, I enjoyed reading it.

[melissa]

This really beautiful i enjoy reading your poems so much i wish I could write that good keep up the great work

[Jack Kennedy]

Thank you for the compliments! :)

[melissa]

You're welcome

[A Soap Mess Stories]

Sounds like a real love story. Great writing.

[Jack Kennedy]

Thanks for the Review

[PP]

Her is lucky :) Great work!

[Jack Kennedy]

thanks for the review. Take Care

[PP]

My pleasure :)

[Madalyn Beck]

Beautiful. Just what every girl wants to hear! Great write! (:

[Jack Kennedy]

thanks for reviewing. Take Care

[DreamOn2014]

Beautiful, absolutely beautiful Jack.

[NoelHC]

I related very well to the sentiments you are expressing here, and it is always good when you have "found her"
You are young I see, and maybe the "her" right now may not be the "her" of the years to come, but if you can feel that same way then, it will be great.
Nice work here.

[Jack Kennedy]

Thanks for the review and advice. I hope this leads you to my other works. Take Care