R A I N

An Ode to my favorite Weather

Coming down for everybody to feel
Cold wet air in the breeze
When you hit my skin everything's real
Don't you ever stop please

From the clouds in the sky you're so high
Are you god's tears from his very eyes
You're the rawest truth and never will lie
Turn it from the bluest to the greyest skies

Author's Note

It's either unfinished or something is missing I haven't decided yet.
RATE IT 1-10!!!

Reviews

[Ravyne Hawke]

I am quirky in that I do not care much for rhyming poetry. With that said, this one is not forced, the rhymes flow easily... a very good thing. I love how you've made rain the topic and described it and not the emotions rain usually denotes. Your rhymes also have a solid rhythm a nice ba da ba da ba da to them. Again, great marks for keeping that. I would say, a 8 out of 10. Only because I think we can always improve our own work after it has sat and stewed a while. Well done, Jack.

[Daisy]

great imagination you have there.............. i think it gives the whole concept.... means its complete

[Stefanie Holmes]

This poem flows smoothly and the rhyming isn't forced which makes it an easy read. I really enjoyed this Jack!

~Stefanie

[jane kelley]

Jack, I think the poem is finished.. I like it the way it is.. it flows nicely, your rhyming is smooth..
and you totally described how the rain makes you feel..

[Jack Kennedy]

Thanks! To me there is no longer anything to add. I see that in retrospect

[jane kelley]

Jack, would you please vote for me.. just entered a Tallenge contest.. here is the link.. thank you
http://www.tallenge.com/vote/vote0.aspx?vid=e4be7b16-2d6d-464a-abf1-49d8b1cde456

[Jack Kennedy]

Sure thing!

[jane kelley]

thank you, Jack.. just found out you can vote more than once :)

[Ana B.]

I always wanted to write about rain...never could come up with something accordingly.....loved it!
8,5/10

[melissa]

I agree with Jennie 100% i love the poem you did amazing job writing this poem keep up the great i hope you get published

[Jack Kennedy]

Thank you so much! I'm enjoying the reviews and support

[melissa]

You're welcome

[A Soap Mess Stories]

It's a good start...rain does make everything seem brand new, especially in the spring when the grass becomes green and plants and flowers start blooming again...

[Jennie Baron]

I agree with Lori that I like the rhythm of this one and the rhymes do not seem forced. I also like the images and you make rain seem very sensual.

[Jack Kennedy]

Thanks for the review. Glad you're liking the works

[lissalovesyou]

So refreshing! This is the first poem to appreciate rain instead of saying how gloomy and dark the weather is. Great job!
lissalovesyou:)

[TheSearcher]

rhymes, relatable, calming, and thoughtful. I like. I give 90

[Margo Seuss]

How sweet! Indeed rain is a phenomenon worth writing. Keep writing and reading your works. This is the only advice I can give you!