The Voices That Plague Me

The Voices that plague me day and night

The Voices

They tell me not to feel guilt

For the actions I have done
They tell me that I have done them a favour

And they'll leave me alone when I have completed

My use

They were with me when I screamed

When I screamed alone
When I cried

When I begged for them to leave my head
When I pulled my hair
And dragged my nails down my face

As I drew the knife down my victims' body 
And shook and pleaded for them not to make me
They soothed my fears and encouraged me
Person after person
Life after life
My tears mingling with the blood of a dying human

And now? 

I'm tied to a white bed
In a white room
With people in white uniform
Telling me the Voices aren't real
I've completed my use

And they've left me here to rot
To receive the burden for the sins they made me commit

The Voices that plagued me day and night
Have fulfilled their duty
And leave me here to tell you
What you will never believe 

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I feel that this is a great topic for poetry, one that i have often seen used. Something about your execution seems off though--either word choice, pacing, or both.
ie: " Tears mingling with the close to death human"
This is a very offsetting phrase. There are some very...'poetically sensual' (i have no idea what to call it) phrases in this poem. But a phrase like "close to death human" offsets that standard. Maybe replace it with something more fluent and poetic.

Also, the quick transition from past to present is a bit too abrupt. maybe do it a little bit more subtly, and without using the word "now"

With just a little revision, this could be a masterpiece.
may the force be with you xb

[GunMetal]

Fascinating work here. The topic is sinister by nature, and difficult to convey but you pulled it off really well. Italicizing "my use" was a really nice touch. Keep it up!