You and I

You and I

A Poem by Tara
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You and I

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You and I 
Have become a routine
The spark we had?
Lost
And here I am trying to reignite it 
But why should i bother
When all you do is douse it?
You and I 
Were once a dream 
And I do not deny 
In my dreams you are still there
But, you're not the Knight in Shining Armour 
I had before

© 2012 Tara


Author's Note

Tara
Okay, so this is different to my usual poems...

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Minor spelling mistake: i should be I.
Too direct and too cliche. Not what I like.
But it has some good points as well: you have made use of repetition and chronology. Next time: work on the chronology-repetition combination. It can turn out great.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Added on October 30, 2011
Last Updated on November 9, 2012
Tags: You, I, Spark, Love, Knight, Dream

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Tara
Tara

Cardiff, United Kingdom



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A Poem by Tara