The Pet

Don't judge the poem until you read all the way through, but read it through. I hope it makes you think, as this subject is something I can't let go of.

Wounded eyes, surprised by the pain

The master swings his hand again.

A loud yip, the pet falls to the floor

She stays down, and out of harm's way.

A master who's never happy, unless inflicting pain

Eyes bruised and beaten, out goes hope's flame.

A trip to the vet, fix the broken bones

The vet rolls his eyes. She tripped and fell off the porch.

The playful pup, enjoys a simple game

Anger flares, a bad day at work

She limps away, a new bruise for her tail wag

All she wants is his affection.

There isn't much hope left in this poor dog's eyes.

Its been beaten away, no gentle pat on the head

No room to run, a short chain, just for fun.

I hope this made you angry, to seethe with rage.

How could anyone abuse a pet in such a way?

Such a monster definitely does not deserve his life!

Would you be surprised if I tell you a secret?

This master is a loving husband, and the dog his beaten wife.

Reviews

[Silent Serenity also kn..]

"Where are we, as a species, if we wouldn't treat an animal the way we treat the ones we are supposed to love?"

All about power, beat down the one who gives him everything...he couldn't treat his boss like this, he couldn't treat a friend like this, he wouldn't dare treat his mother like this (or would he?) But sure in hell he would brow beat his wife because she must forgive....men like that abuse because they know their wives has very low opinions of herself and is fearful to be alone..........I have so much to say on this....I was actually getting angry because I felt sorry for the poor dog....then I realized what you were writing and my heart stopped and my head hung low....I'll leave it at that but will say......

Thank you for creating this magnificent piece, for you are a man who will not raise the hand towards a women and the fact that you wrote about it you showed me a light that not all men abuse...there are some that don't agree with hitting and it isn't so natural like waking up in the morning and going to bed at night...a hand can be gentle not hurtful

"deep breath"
Thank you for sharing Solitary Traveler....Silent Raven is impressed

[Solitary Traveler]

This is a subject that is too common, and I'm not sure if the events are getting worse, or women are becoming more vocal about what crimes are being committed against them. Either way, a man has no right to lay his hand upon his wife, girl, mother, daughter, or any woman, period.

[Justine]

o..m...g.. how anyone can do such things sends my anger off the scale. Unfortunately the penalties are never enough and really don't do "justice" (whatever that means). I have had animals from our local shelter who have been used, abused and abandoned. The effects are always there and it takes a lot of hard work to build that trust, but once you have it, it's beautiful. You write with clarity and impact. An excellent topic - well done. Justine

[Solitary Traveler]

I hope you read that last line that identifies the real actors in this play of mine. I write about what I know, and what I've discovered from unidentified friends. Their lives are what make my stories come to life. If you did see that last line, thank you for the compliments.

[Akira Kodama]

Absolutely beautiful. Well, not beautiful yet beautiful, if you catch my drift. Abuse is a horrible problem that sadly will never completely go away. Irrational peoples cannot channel their anger in a healthier way and succumb to abuse of the ones who love them most.

I had no trouble reading this in the sense that there were no freezing points where the flow was messed up. The descriptions were fantastic and the message was as well. I very much appreciate you putting this up. Great job.

[Scott Metro]

Sadness...either way...nothing but corrupt politicians deserve a life so scary...so hopeless.
Good job my friend.
Enjoyed it.

Scott

[Damien Marty]

For the sake of fluidity I would remove the final line asking where we are as a species. Your poem did a well enough job inspiring that sort of thought in me as a direct result of reading it, to put it in again at the end breaks the flow you developed so efficiently

Mostly because it suddenly takes away the reader's ability to interpret the message, the final line rings true because "Oh snap people DO beat the snot out of their families, as well as their animals, this poem could honestly be referring to both" but that bit after that swoops right in and says "Yep, but seriously this poem is about a dog".

[Solitary Traveler]

You are right, it doesn't fit the overall flow. Snap. and Done.

[annabellee]

"This master is a loving husband, and the dog his beaten wife."
I thought so much.
Sad and thought-provoking.
well done :)

[Evelynne Tionge]

wow! I love your plot.
Its a unique angle you have used to relay a message we all need to consider carefully.
I love it

[Solitary Traveler]

Thank you Evelynne.

[Evelynne Tionge]

my pleasure :)

[Bob Sherunkle]

That was very well written.Hearbreaking.

[Solitary Traveler]

Thank you, Bob.

[Cryingkate]

Wow, Great Job ! mission accomplished !

[Solitary Traveler]

Thank you for the kind words.

[Sami Khalil]

"This master is a loving husband, and the dog his beaten wife."

Wow. You have summed up the idea in that one line. A very sad but realistic poem on how some husbands treat their wives as dogs and don't give them the proper love and due respect. They think they own her and can throw some bones to please her...No need for slavery and degredation...Bravo

[Solitary Traveler]

I just hope it makes others think.

[Sami Khalil]

Yep. You are welcome...:)...................