The battle inside

Today was a nightmare, a horrid dream
With no hope for a return, and no ability to scream
I was abandoned by hope and harassed by reality
I was taunted by aggravation and persecuted by morality
Depression came too, and she was by far the worst
Tapping into your deepest fears, where it really hurts
I tried hard to escape, but there was no way to hide
It's hard to avoid your enemy, when it's your own mind

Reviews

[pia]

By far one of the best poems ive read
Really good rhyme scheme and imagery
The theme behind it is a battle most of us fight on a daily basis !! The structure was well put together and honestly the last line was great. Your mind plays you all the time and can be your greatest enemy sometimes
Well written

[Eden-Rose]

Thank you so very much!

[Matthew Soliguen]

Well you know what they say, big things come in small packages, and this one was bursting with a deep sense of familiarity. I really love how you capture a life's worth of emotion and put it in such a short poem. Wish I could write like that one day!

[Eden-Rose]

Thank you so very much! You are too kind!

[CAPOLAVORO]

Wow Eden Rose. You wrote the real and put life to every words that speaks pain and fear. I like how realistic this one is and everyone could relate. Well done.

[Eden-Rose]

Thank you so much!

[Stacy Purvis]

Ah, yes, the duality of one's own self only discovered through introspection.

[Tabby Mac]

LOVE...LOVE...LOVE THIS!! This captures reality of the battle inside ones mind perfectly! Love the flow, word choice...EVERYTHING!
Clap. Clap. Clap!!!
Well written!
Tabby

[Eden-Rose]

Thank you so much!

[Cœur]

Very nicely done. Short, but still gets the message across without rushing. I felt like I was being talked to more then reading something, which is good. I also noticed that if you cut it off by each comma, you could create another poem. I liked it, good job.

[Eden-Rose]

Thank you truly,

[Hari Om]

Very captivating thoughts

[Eden-Rose]

Thank you so much!

[Farhan Shaikh]

Strong poem..honest
Very well penned

[Eden-Rose]

Thank you so much!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I agree. The last line of this piece is the strongest one and brings about quite a finality to the write. Escaping one's own mind is kind of an impossible task..
Nicely penned, ER 😊

[Eden-Rose]

Thank you so much!

[Misterr Remeat]

Ah...I used to get quite a few days like that and can totally relate. You are definitely NOT terrible with words!

[Eden-Rose]

Thank you very much!