Cry for help

Trembling alone buried under torn golden locks
Cries a broken little girl posing as an adult
She looks to the sky with worn, tear filled eyes
Wondering why her creator wished her such demise
What did I do? she curses up above
To deserve such hate when all I've given you was love
Why do you decide to punish me so?
Are you beating me down so I'll let go?
So I'll give up my strength and leave everything behind
So I'll give up hope and pretending that I'm fine
My faith has never been so low, please just give me a sign
That someday this will be over and happiness will be mine
For now I am broken Lord and I need your healing hand
So my legs and my mind will no longer tremble when I try to stand
I'm begging you please reply to my cry for help
I can't do this on my own, because I don't trust myself.

Reviews

[Tabby Mac]

LOVE THIS PIECE!!
This captures the rawness of true feelings. Ones I have felt before. I love how you've exposed the very soul...in words.
"I don't trust myself."
This is a sad deep write. A healing write as well. We shake our fist first at God for all our mistakes and wrong choices or even things that have been done to us beyond our control...feeling the weight of the world that one can't get up.
"Cries of a broken little girl posing as an adult."
Either something keeps us in child mode or we hold ourselves there. Sometimes because of making choices we thought we'd never make.
This is a very relatable poem. I think many will be comforted by the truth of process in this piece. Although it is rip my heart out sad, feel the blood seep off the page kind of pain...
This piece reminds me of where I use to be. And reminds me to be great that I'm no longer there.
Hugs to you for writing such a heartfelt, raw piece!
Tabby

[Eden-Rose]

Thank you so very much!

[Taz]

The constant flow and beauty was amazing in this poem! I almost cried. I could feel the strength of emotion in these words and it was beautiful. Honey I rate you 100!!!

[Lena]

The pain is palpable. The response it is crying out for is ..... James 1:13 and remembering that Philippians 4:13. Knowing that Job never knew why he suffered as he did but he never let go even when his faith was at a low point...... in the end he still knew God and had God's Love. For all of us who suffers injustice in all of it's forms remember where to put your trust..... Proverbs 3:5. You are a powerful writer.

[Gee]

Hmmm, Faith the crutch. Never gonna get my head around so many believing in stories now 2000 years old. That being said this is a nice rhyming poem

[H.N.Seal]

I LOVE THIS!! At one point in my life I blamed the lord for my depression and cursed his name for not saving me from my suicidal thoughts. Little did i know the lord had never left my side but watched me through my worst times. Looking back now as i am in a better mental state i see that what happened to me need to happen so i could get better. The lord does test our faith , sometimes in small ways and sometimes in ways were you almost lose faith. But i have learned that everything that happens will find a way to help and shape your future for the better.

[CAPOLAVORO]

I love how the words flow perfectly and they fit sp wonderfully into each other. The begging on the last part makes it complete. The legs and mind will n longer tremble part is so good. Keep writing. :)

[Alem]

Your poem is soo touching and i love how you experiment with words and always look a different way to express yourself.

[Eden-Rose]

Thank you so very much.

[danielle.]

Trust your self, Eden Rose, our self is the only thing we truly have control of in life. What you need is within.

I love your sincerity, the uglyness of life but described with beautiful words and so transformed into art.

[Eden-Rose]

Thank you very much

[Adam Adams]

I must consider this poetry one of my favorites. It's the very first work of yours that i read this evening from you, and quite honestly, i like the way you move along winds, so passionately. Life's about love, but what all we get, in the name of this curse, nothing but remorse which eats us deep inside, & takes us behind the fog of misery. Everybody's passing throu' some kinda pain, struggling throu' the dilemma of mind, and keeps wandering throu' the analogies of life... which makin' each & everyone's life so unbalanced. We all want being happy, but what we get in return is: "Emptiness".

Looking forward to reading your work!

[Eden-Rose]

Thank you very much for your review.

[Jackson H. Harley]

I love this work! I like the disfunctional structure; it adds anther layer to that feeling of uncertainty and pain. and it's relatable to so many people, including myself, which just adds to the art of it, awesome work :)

[Eden-Rose]

Thank you truly!

[Jackson H. Harley]

You're welcome :)