Money

a poem i wrote on a whym when talking to my rich friend. talking about the diffrenes in our lives and stuff like that. Pretty cool and has alot of feeling in it.

His formal wear looks cool

                     Her jeans look quite nice

He's wearing a tie

                     A million hair-ties cover her arms

He pulled up in his Gocart

                     She was walking....

did he just smile at me?

                     I got a nod of the head back!

          What is this feeling?

I don't even know him

                     I've never seen her before

But...

                     But...

         I like them.

               But

I'm poor...

                     I'm rich....

         and they aren't

I live in a set of rented appartments

                     I own a two story house, in a gated community

i share a closet sized room with my 3 sibings

                     I have my own room, the size of  a small classroom

Ramen is the usual dinner

                     Dinner? whatever I want

my yearly vacation is to the public pool

                     We go to disneyland EVERY year

My guitar is my life

                     my liffe is music

He'd never understand

                     she wouldn't feel the same

          Then again

Maybe he would

                     she might....

I dont care that he's rich

                     Her  money status means nothing

I'm falling for him already

                     I like her

          and I dont care

         about the money

Author's Note

ignores mistakes, and no I dont like my friend but it makes an interesting topic though

Reviews

[LisetteCanWrite!]

An interesting topic that I have issues with as well.. in the past.. I was born with nothing.. had the privilege of doing alot of great things throughout my life due to other family with money, cottage and other toys. For some this is not an issue.. sadly the fear and greed people hold to their belongings has shown me that it can interfere with a relationship.. again that is just my view! I believe that with my experience (living with someone with alot of money.. I even designed and signed an agreement to protect both sides) that too many others in both circles can cause headaches if allowed to .. can do much damage and create fear in both hearts when they become more serious.. I don't know if I would like to go that route again.. as it is truly heartbreaking.. torture. Gossip reigns supreme in these relationships.. almost like Romeo and Juliet.. two different worlds.. it's tough to blend! Many have made it though.. Thank you for sharing! =)

[Kira]

Hm...interesting. I like the parts when it's both bold and italicized, showing at they're thinking the same thing. However it is sort of choppy in places, and it is fixable definitely. Not perfect but close.

-Kira