The broken ball and chain

Part 9/10 of my 2 year poem Absence

Time
has
past
as
legends
do

And
in
return
so
have
you

Reviews

[Raef C. Boylan]

Its brevity comes across as profound. I quite like this, it's quick and jaunty in rhythm, yet not in meaning.

I think you've lost somebody, a wife or girlfriend, to mortality [I read a few of your other pieces]. If so, I'm sorry that it happened.

Good write.
The lay out works well to make each word have impact.

p.s.
"time has past" - is this a play on words, or should it be 'passed'?

[w. r.]

hmmm...interesting work...i like how you separated each word...yeah...

[nods]