The vow of Insanity

First published in Vol 2. Issue 3 of Unquiet desperation

Insanity when did you come to me
When did you first scorch my mind
And your intervals are more intriguing
Then any carnivals around
Don't need no laughing clowns
Just you inside my mind to hypnotize
All that I can see or think

I thank you much for bringing me so
Far away from sanity and it's reality
Your surrealism is much more amusing
And your ups and downs are all around
To keep this world from boredom

Thank you dear insanity for thinking of me
For introducing yourself to my ways
And invading my mind each day
Don't worry when I shout at you
To leave me alone from what you do
For every time that you leave
I start to always miss you

So don't take my words and fly like a bird
Away from here for I do swear
That I want you around to increase
What does surround and attract me
To things that just can't be found
With out your presence there

I do love you I swear
Even if I curse your name
And you bring me to despair
All I want is you my friend
So insanity please listen to me
As I have listened all day through
I vow myself to you.

Reviews

[Ice QueenJen]

As I read this, I too thought this is how I am feeling. I could relate to each and every line, but hopefully the voices will stop screaming at me.

Such a great and moving writing.

[Kitten]

beautiful. utterly beautiful.
aside from the fact that I know exactly what you mean (or at least read the same feeling into it as I have been feeling), I love the way that the stanzas flow, bringing you right into the next one without more than a breath. It conveys complex emotion amazingly.

[Maya]

good! im definitely with you on loving insanity. it seems to open up to a lot more then if youre sane. haha
some notes:
Far away from sanity and it's reality- a good line but after using "insanity" in the first line, i think you need to change "sanity" to something else. i dont know the sentence just doesnt flow right. maybe change it to something like Far away from reality and it's tangibility. maybe?

good job!

[Misa]

Hmm. This has a lot to it, so l think it deserves an indepth review if l can. (l hope you don't mind.)
l'm going to experiment by using the add notes function - that'll be my reivew, although if it doesnt' work l'll go ahead and do it the normal way, k? hope you don't mind being my ginea pig

edit - the notes worked after a bit of fiddling. wish l knew how to change color of font for you, (to show the difference between my comments and your writing) but l hope it helps. :)