Eternal Wait

After the many attempts without succession…
Seeing what I want right in front of my eyes…
The mind goes numb and my bones go along for the ride

The sun rise
Right in my face
A glass box skin tight

Trying to get some type of reaction
Thinking my mind can create a catalyst
Was a silly inner deep notion
I won’t get by in this fashion
Rather old fashioned I guess

The sun rise
Right in my face
A glass box skin tight
Rolling up into nothingness
Shock inflicted there fright

Rather old fashioned I guess…
Rather old…
I can only guess
What it is thinking
The creation of man
Strange cloning geist
Creepy, attractive, seductive
The list goes all the way down to erotic…

The sun rise
Right up in my face
A glass boxed vacuum skin tight
My eyes recede into nothingness
From the fright of stillness
A seizure overcomes my being
Every time I try to move

                                            …Every time I try to move
Every time I try to move
I get teased as the holes dissipate when I come near
I’m a mere slave to gravities pressure; I have been tamed
My thoughts; eternally maimed
My efforts; eternally irrelevant
Time to bare
Time to obey
Time to endure…
Industrial binding
Blue green steel; rattling chains, my snow and ice
Chinese finger trap, I’ll stop
I’ll drink your poison even with it high in lactose
…Stop, wait.. No, I am anything but desperate

This is a sight
Quick to the answer? I usually am
I’m done with the thought; forever

What is foreseen to last past my own life
I will bare
…obey
…submit to…

I’ll endure the eternal wait
…Because I have too

Author's Note

listen to calm music whilst reading, read it slowly and enjoy...its about love and relationships well that is what inspired it, the fact that people tease me by talking then ignoring...however it has many interpretations such as things i believe in such as patience for what you desire, or in general, also can mean that time stood still as you saw a tragedy, with the world crumbling around you. this may not be the most creative writing I've done but I have a certain connection with it. feel free to share your thoughts. (Yes that photo is mine I think i captured a ghost haha)

Reviews

[The Wave]

nice
love the imagery... "Blue green steel; rattling chains, ..."

whilst reading it tho, i did get lost in your overall idea...your thoughts are a bit scattered...
there are also a few grammar/spelling things i picked up on. fairly minor tho...

overall, this has great potential, just needs to be revised, cleaned up a bit. but i like where this is headed...
good job.

[Dillon Cotter]

Awesome details and imagery, it gives a better understanding as the reader reads more. This is incrediable dude.

-Will

[Naomi Montana Walsh]

I was listening to very soft music, this poem is one I read and think why can't I write like that? I felt your spirit in this one and I really like it..and I shall read it again..