Give me Three Bottles of Whiskey

Give me Three Bottles of Whiskey

A Poem by Ecnelis
"

Give me three bottles of shimmering, golden poison

"

Give me three bottles of shimmering, golden poison

That I can pour down my aching throat

So it will numb me, tingling, from the inside out

And get her goddamn face out of my head

So I can finally get some sleep tonight

© 2010 Ecnelis


Author's Note

Ecnelis
As I took a break from drawing, I took my dogs on a walk. This is what I came out with.

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That is one way of doing it...

What was good of this -
I felt it enough to want to be facetious.
takes effort to be real...
you did it well.

Take care,
Chris

Posted 13 Years Ago


Aren't you a little YOUNG to be drinking?
Well, I guess that never actually stops anyone, does it.

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Posted 13 Years Ago


Simple and brutal with an honesty running parallel to the words, a detachment craved for born through loss.

Posted 13 Years Ago


This is good and quite hard hitting. I find it interesting that people find such release in alcohol. A nice write, well done.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Damn hypnotic, damn dirt-dishing, damn honest, damn dreamy, damn fractured, damn illuminating, damn beautiful, damn brilliant!!! ㋡

Posted 13 Years Ago


Lol, I know this feeling well, except it ususally takes me four.

Enjoyed this!
Antonio :)


Posted 14 Years Ago


It is the point when a person just wants to be relieved out of the misery and pain that he gets from relationships.. at any cost..

"So i can finally get some sleep tonight.." the ending couldn't be much more better.. thanks for sharing.

Posted 14 Years Ago


damn-i love this--from the first line-
"Give me three bottles of shimmering, golden poison"
to the last two...
"And get her goddamn face out of my head
So I can finally get some sleep tonight?"
...what a mood set here!!!:)

J:)



Posted 14 Years Ago


Breakups can be difficult and poison is an alternative to a disturbed mind I suppose. I like the way it sounds like dialog in a movie. As though a woman were crashing into herself with angst. Well done with spunk.

Posted 14 Years Ago


crazy wonderful with what a deep and riveting bite~ from fluid honey lines in two~to a rich scream to rip apart the features of memory~ such power~

Posted 14 Years Ago



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Added on June 29, 2010
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Ecnelis
Ecnelis

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