Give me Three Bottles of Whiskey
A Poem by
Ecnelis
Give me three bottles of shimmering, golden poison
Give me three bottles of shimmering, golden poison
That I can pour down my aching throat
So it will numb me, tingling, from the inside out
And get her goddamn face out of my head
So I can finally get some sleep tonight
© 2010 Ecnelis
Author's Note
As I took a break from drawing, I took my dogs on a walk. This is what I came out with.
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That is one way of doing it...
What was good of this -
I felt it enough to want to be facetious.
takes effort to be real...
you did it well.
Take care,
Chris
Posted 13 Years Ago
Aren't you a little YOUNG to be drinking?
Well, I guess that never actually stops anyone, does it.
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Posted 13 Years Ago
Aren't you a little YOUNG to be drinking?
Well, I guess that never actually stops anyone, does it.
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Simple and brutal with an honesty running parallel to the words, a detachment craved for born through loss.
Posted 13 Years Ago
Simple and brutal with an honesty running parallel to the words, a detachment craved for born through loss.
This is good and quite hard hitting. I find it interesting that people find such release in alcohol. A nice write, well done.
Posted 13 Years Ago
This is good and quite hard hitting. I find it interesting that people find such release in alcohol. A nice write, well done.
Damn hypnotic, damn dirt-dishing, damn honest, damn dreamy, damn fractured, damn illuminating, damn beautiful, damn brilliant!!! ㋡
Posted 13 Years Ago
Damn hypnotic, damn dirt-dishing, damn honest, damn dreamy, damn fractured, damn illuminating, damn beautiful, damn brilliant!!! ㋡
Lol, I know this feeling well, except it ususally takes me four.
Enjoyed this!
Antonio :)
Posted 14 Years Ago
Lol, I know this feeling well, except it ususally takes me four.
Enjoyed this!
Antonio :)
It is the point when a person just wants to be relieved out of the misery and pain that he gets from relationships.. at any cost..
"So i can finally get some sleep tonight.." the ending couldn't be much more better.. thanks for sharing.
Posted 14 Years Ago
It is the point when a person just wants to be relieved out of the misery and pain that he gets from relationships.. at any cost..
"So i can finally get some sleep tonight.." the ending couldn't be much more better.. thanks for sharing.
damn-i love this--from the first line-
"Give me three bottles of shimmering, golden poison"
to the last two...
"And get her goddamn face out of my head
So I can finally get some sleep tonight?"
...what a mood set here!!!:)
J:)
Posted 14 Years Ago
damn-i love this--from the first line-
"Give me three bottles of shimmering, golden poison"
to the last two...
"And get her goddamn face out of my head
So I can finally get some sleep tonight?"
...what a mood set here!!!:)
J:)
Breakups can be difficult and poison is an alternative to a disturbed mind I suppose. I like the way it sounds like dialog in a movie. As though a woman were crashing into herself with angst. Well done with spunk.
Posted 14 Years Ago
Breakups can be difficult and poison is an alternative to a disturbed mind I suppose. I like the way it sounds like dialog in a movie. As though a woman were crashing into herself with angst. Well done with spunk.
crazy wonderful with what a deep and riveting bite~ from fluid honey lines in two~to a rich scream to rip apart the features of memory~ such power~
Posted 14 Years Ago
crazy wonderful with what a deep and riveting bite~ from fluid honey lines in two~to a rich scream to rip apart the features of memory~ such power~
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