Servant of Evil

I took the title based on the video on the note

Once upon a time, there was a treacherous yellow kingdom. Reigning on the top was a fourteen years old princess. Luxurious and gorgeous furnishings and riches she had, was exploited from the ignorant person who went against her.

“Come and kneel to me!” was her favourite sentence to say

The servant had very similar her face, that’s her sibling. The first thing they knew was the voice of the church bells. They belonged to each other, but because of the selfish adult, they had to say goodbye. Their destiny being separated and he must listen to his lil sist wishes.

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One day, the servant was walking at the neighbourhood country. Wind brought his hat to a girl. The girl has beautiful eyes, kind voice, and warm smiling face, she is from the green kingdom. He fell in love at first sight.

The princess was really jealous with the neighbouring country’s princess, the woman of the green kingdom. She summoned her servant and, in quite voice, she said

“Destroy the country of the green..”

The princess gave command. The servant did nothing but accomplish her wish. He called the girl that he loves to the place where they have been to talk together. In very hard feeling, he stabbed her chest. The girl fell to his hug and said

“It’s okay, not your fault”

“Why my tears won’t stop?”

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Many houses were burned to ashes, many lives were lost as a result. The sorrow of the suffering people didn’t reach the princess.

“Oh, it’s time for a snack” her favourite sentence to hear

The servant brought her snacks, and she was smiling, smile innocently.

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The evil princess had to be brought down. Finally, the people stood up. Tired with the war, they surrounded the yellow castle. They demanded the princess to come out without upheaval.

Although the people of yellow escaped, the lovely attractive princess was finally caught. The red armour herself will give her punishment.

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War still was firing up between the kingdoms. Just wait for the tickling time, surely this kingdom will end by the angered citizen. The servant watched what happen outside by the window. I have something to do. He walked to his self and then searched his master.

The princess was really confused and felt scared. She just looks at the window in sigh. The servant come to the princess and put his hand on her shoulder softly.

“Here, change into my clothes, and please escape immediately. Surely no one will realize, because we are twins” He is already in the princess’s dress, he smiles warmly.

The door knocked by the soldier. Ask for the princess to come out. The servant now pulls the princess to the secret run out way and locks the door to the castle from that way. Then he walks to the soldier and follow what they wanted. Without fight, he accepted the punishment.

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The princess now is a fugitive. The door locked, she just can ran outside and find out. She heard that the princess, her servant, accept the punishment. It will be held at 3pm, when the church bell ringing. She ran to the place, not bothered to the crowd. She pulled herself to see her servant.

Finally the time arrived. She smiled to him, to cheers herself up actually. The bell that announced the end rang. In the slight second her servant say

Her favourite sentence to hear.

She was keep smiling till the servant has no breath. Tears fall to her cheek. 

Author's Note

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=V2vSq0YoWjA

Reviews

[Dai Hanshou]

Errors, errors. I'll just fix some of them seeing as I'm too tired to point out everything.


Luxurious and gorgeous furnishings and riches she had, was exploited from the ignorant person who go* against her. - who 'went' against her.

“Come and kneel to me!”* her favourite sentence to say - 'was' her favourite thing to say.

They belongs* each other - what? It'd be 'They belonged to eachother'.

Their destiny being separated and he must listen to his lil sist wishes - I don't understand what you meant by this sentence. -____-

Wind was brings* his hat to a girl. - Wind 'brought his hat to a girl.'

He fell in love in first sight - love AT first sight

The princess is* really jealous with the neighbouring country’s princess, - 'is'? You wrote the whole story in past tense, why 'is'? It's 'The princess was'

The girl fell to his hug and say* - say? No,'SAID'.

Many houses were reduced* to ashes, many lives were being* lost - houses were BURNED to ashes, many lives were lost as a result.


The evil princess had to be brought down. Finally, the people stand* up - the people STOOD up.

Tired with the war, they surround* the yellow castle instead* - surrounded. And 'instead' of what?

They demanded the princess *come out without fight*. - They demanded the princess to come out without upheaval. (fight seems too weird to use here.)

There ya go.

[Hibiki]

My bad.. I wasn't pay attention to the grammar :(
Thank you so much~! I appreciate your help!

[For Who I Am]

I remember this!!! I watched avideo on it and when i saw this it made me feel heartbroken all over again. looking back on this story, itbwa really awesome!

[For Who I Am]

WOW! I am always into dark fairy tales and this was one of the best. I didn't care about errors because it came from a creative mind.

[Bluefire]

I LOVE this story!
Very well done. ^^

[Totoro-Sama]

VOCALOID ! OMG. Lovely Story.

[Dark Princess]

Wow that's an interesting story. I liked it even though the ending was sad.

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

Loved the story, amazing write!

Kaze~ :-D

[Hibiki]

Thank you~~

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

Your welcome. :-D

[Dark Rider]

I LOVE this song! All the songs in the Story of Evil series. And I love the way you wrote it into this story. It was simple, yet held all of the key events and feelings that Len felt. Amazing job! I love it! :)

[Hibiki]

Thank you~~
Yes, I love all the songs in Story of evil Series ^^