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F**k where am I going with my life. Four years of making coffee in Starbucks for cheeky arseholes. I'm studying Journalism even though I know I don't want to be a journalist. My relationship is a joke. This is a low point.

Two pensive hours pass before the softness of my pillows lures me into drifting ... drifting ... n i close my eyes. I can hear a woman...shouting something crude...an ambulance siren...
 

My television buzzes to life

by itself

the fuzzy channel

 

My stomach sinks. My eyes dart around the room: 

                               nothing 
           nobody

Paralysed

                     Sweat

It's not possible. I switched it off at the plug. I remember switching it off at the plug. I couldn't have switched it off. The black and white dots fuse on the screen.
 

Wretched rasping

a creature in pain

in my cupboard

                      

What is in my cupboard. What is trying to scare me. I moan weakly. I can't handle this. I don't like this. I can't handle this. A tear leaks out of my eye. I sit up in bed.

Haaaaaaaaaa

I'm clawing the covers. 'Come out' I try to say. I bite my bottom lip. I swipe my tears away. I put a foot on the floor. Then the other foot. I'm trembling. I can't handle this. I stand

The cupboard door swings open

" Haarrap xeeeyk
Scatham botchata lorop ru bowwufape
Voiloscreeti botswanda
Vaxie rihnnuqasado
Shhhhhh kalam borganot "


I am banging my head against the television screen.

The eyes...
The eyes that paralyse

My face is smashed in
AT LAST i see purple and green dotssss

 

 

 

Reviews

[Captain Ugly]

No complaints. Great write with strong personal conneting points.
Love the movement of the words on:

"My stomach sinks. My eyes dart around the room:

nothing
nobody

Paralysed

Sweat"
It's very engaging. I'd like to see more of it in the piece. Kick a*s write!

Just Me.
Captain Ugly.

[Simplicity]

The format is interesting, it catches my eye. Thanks for submitting it into the "Halloween Tributes" Contest!

[Chillbear Latrigue]

This was really cool. I wish I could come up with a more eloquent word, but "cool" fits. I have a number of friends that work at Starbucks, so I have heard these frustrations first hand. My belief as a cop is that your work is more crucial to society than mine. This country moves on coffee. What a great piece.

[Rachel]

suprising.

[Keeley]

i like the format as well. it makes it even more interesting than it already is

I like the use of bold and italicized letters and writing in fragments. It makes the story more interesting.

[Hedra Helix]

oooooooooo youre awesome!
fragmented and whole, sparse and travely though emotion motion vision dream reality familiarity and fear plus a buncho other words.

wow.

I repeat you are awesome this is clean.

[Roger Ferguson II]

i like the format, its different. very interesting story!