Indecision

As I lie down, questions come to mind
Turning in circles, chasing answers I can't find
Friend against friend, back against the wall
Death before change, or life before all?
Overwhelming is the stillness
That comprises my last judgement

Author's Note

As always, any thoughts are welcome

Reviews

[M.D. Aguiar]

A pretty piece; I do believe you meant 'lie' rather than "lay" in the first line, though. The lyricism of the poem is inconsistent and a bit sporadic. I, personally, think the second line is four syllables longer than it needs to be; others are shorter. Melodically, it could be improved upon, though the theme is sufficiently sincere and is aesthetically and intellectually appealing.

[Glen]

EastN, I like this...in such a few words you have captured for me those moments of indecision when the choice or making no choice is almost overwhelming...."overwhelming in the stillness". This is quite powerful; lots more here too.

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem asked many good question. Open the door to a long conversation.
"Friend against friend, back against the wall
Death before change, or life before all? "
Old world had gone mad. Brother killing brother everywhere. World is making no sense. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Laminators Dubai]

i get your point
really judgement is hard(at least for me)
Friend against friend, back against the wall ...
supper!
words are working.

[autopsychick0110]

Very deep, despite how short it is. I really like your style. Overall, it's a great poem