Hope

this is my first poem eva

hope 

she’s a hushed feeling 

like the silent whispers in the back of a funeral home 

or the warm and velvety air that escapes my lips on a cool morning

her tranquil existence lingers in the back of my mind 

comparable to the determined ember of a freshly extinguished flame 

deciding to only make her wavering appearances in my direst of times 

i try to avoid our paths crossing at all cost 

because my being is equally diminished when she is there and when she is not 

the undeniable dread i feel within when she is lost 

is unbearable

She is a small child lost in a calamitous storm 

And I am the anxious mother awaiting her return 

Hope! Hope! HOPE 

I would shout at the dark abyss 

My hands desperately grasping into the depth of my spirit 

Even though I know she might be lost forever, 

I constantly anticipate her faint whispers 

But silently comprehending that she may never return from the dredges which she came

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

This is a wonderful first poem Louise. Your poetic expression impressed me and you brought this reader strong imagery. Keep up the good work and welcome to WC.

Chris

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

I really enjoyed reading your poem. It is stark in its description of lost hope, as well as its elusive nature. It can permeate all aspects of our lives yet is hidden. Only to be revealed when needed or lost. We aspire to it, praise it, pray for it, and try to live in it. And some simply walk away from it. But it is always there if we only ever try to look, with both eyes and heart. Thank you for sharing your poem.

[louisa]

Thank you so much for the feedback I really appreciate it! :)

[Relic]

This is a great first poem, Louise. You have good grasp of the words you want to convey which is important. I see this as someone with an unconscience comfort in hard times, yet her presence is frightful because of the times which she arrives.

I hope that makes sense. I may need to read it again a couple more times, but in any case. This is a great first poem. Welcome to the sight. :)

[louisa]

thank you so much :)