Silent Night

In the night all is silent

nothing but a rustle here and there

Wildlife seems scarce but you know it's somewhere

Lurking, creeping, hiding in the dark

they move so fast but don't leave a trace or mark

And you wonder if in this silent night beasts come out and fight

You suddenly hear a growl and run

if you're not fast enough you know your done

closer and closer here they come

Claws sharp and long

you need to escape this, or you'll be torn

then suddenly it's quiet, it's gone

Then slowly up comes the sun

and you know it's morn'

you're saved from yet another fight,

until the next silent night.

Reviews

[Sophie]

This is a really good poem. I thought the imagery was grea and a nice vocabulary used. It was kind of... spooky in a good way... kind of mysterious and not quite there. It's almost like a story or could be a story. 'The Creatures of the Night!' :) Anyway another grea poem from you!!!
~Sophie

[ChocolateLovaa]

Lovee Da Poeemm

[Insanity]

This was a great poem, well written. It had good imagery, and you could almost hear the rustling and growling in this piece. Similar to Azalee, I also read it aloud, and I also think it sounds awkward in a couple of lines. I think some words aren't necessarily needed, and they kind of interrupt the flow. For example, second verse, third line, I don't think you really need the 'and'. But if you really want it, keep it. It's only a suggestion.

It was great read, and I liked the use of 'morn'' in the third last line. Hope to see more of you. :D

[Azalee]

It was well written. :D It had clear imagery for me, sharp and undirited, like you could almost like... taste it in the air, if you get what I mean. It feels a little awkward in some places when you read it aloud, but I think it's fine. :)

kind of sad, but very well written and expressed

[EJB]

my first poem, thought i would give it a go.