Haiku of Phobias

Individual dark poems in haiku form.

I cling to the rung

aching fear tightens my hold

but makes my hands weak

*
screams travel nowhere
body entombed in hard wood

                  can’t see, can’t wrench free

*
blindly groping walls

desperate for a light switch

help... They can see me!

Reviews

[Woody]

deliciously creepy. both scary and funny. frantically groping for the switch haha. boy, I've been there.

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Haha thanks woody, I'm not quite sure I intended them to be funny... but hey, I'm glad you did. Thanks for stopping by. :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

like these, especially the middle one---reminds me of that movie, "premature burial"--

frightening just to think about these pieces, since i am so claustrophobic...i feel all of them...damn, where is that light switch?

j.

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Yeah haha, I was trying to imagine being buried alive when writing the second one.
Thank you for your review. :) much appreciated

[Ovi-Odiete]

These are almost haiku's, but must be arranged in the 5-7-5 pattern....

Each line had a story to be told.... and it was well written...

Poignant and Awesome...

[-inactive now-]

Each one is five/seven/five syllables. But I'm no expert on haiku.
Thank you for your review :)

[softlyfall]

An excellent short poem, but in no way a haiku. Haiku is more than just three lines of set syllables.
You express yourself so well with few words. Tightening your hold but weakening your hands, that is so terrifying in a subtly stated way.
Really really good.

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Ok, I did not realise that about haiku. Thank you for your feedback and the compliment, I much appreciate it :)

[jesserose99]

the mind can be a dark place, and to visit there in haiku form is a very interesting way of writing. I can almost see this as a theatre piece with three actors under a spotlight each reading a fear, because you can feel the psychological impact on each of the haikus.
this was really interesting write, and very well done.

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Thank you :)

[Rachael Lea]

I like this. Its dark and simple and expresses different fears one may have. I have never written haiku poems before but this really kind of makes me want to try. Very well done!

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Thank you:)

[Krizito]

Until I read this, I had no idea of merging 3 individual haiku poems into one that tells a whole story...Nice job.

[-inactive now-]

Ah thank you, I must confess though, they aren't actually one story. But three tiny little ones of three different kinds of fear.. But thank you for your review!

[Lox]

That last fear of the dark was it gave me the chills. Nicely done Robb!

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thank you :)

[Jacob Clifford]

Ooh, I love the way you transition through the haikus. It shows relation between the similar phobias but distinguishes them as separate fears. The subtle differences really glue this piece together.

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thank you :)