Psychosis!

A poem written from some of my experiences, not all personally but from helping others to cope and my studies of mental illness!I hope you enjoy this...God Bless you all! Dia

I unwillingly hear the voices,

echoing inside my head.

aware of my many choices,

one being,if I was dead.

 

I seem to try to stop.

this torment, I do feel.

pills, I have to pop,

to me are a big deal!

 

It really makes me sad,

my life,it looks so bleak,

having so little control,

feeling more,like a freak!

 

Enjoyong life has past,

happiness, I surely seek.

can't remember my last,

feeling comfortable and  meek.

 

My heart it will race,

breathing well,it's rough.

I try to save face...

friends,it's too darn tough.

 

Where or what now?

where should I turn?

do I  just take a bow?

leave behind all concerned.

 

No!I'll hand it to our Lord,

his strength guiding me.

all problems now aboard,

lifes blessings,i'll surely see!

 

                   

                                Diana Wilbanks

 

Reviews

[Michael X]

Diane-you have a natural way with wording and the entire idea brings to mind
the very aspects of condition and how to cope with such- i felt the rhyme form
encapsulate the motion of the rhythm- really nice work-what gets me is the
way you projected emotion into the images, riveting Excllent job, you bring
maters that matter into light and i'm surte work like this draws encouragement

[Ladysue]

Diane, this was a powerful write and very very sad, but the last stanza shows some hope and that is what is needed in everyone's life! Great job!

[Lily1111]

I liked the opening lines:

"I unwillingly hear the voices,
echoing inside my head."

It reminds me of a poem my daughter once wrote where she said: "Do you hear voices in your head, or does God talk to you."

I think this poem portrays the torment and confusion of mental illness. But most of all I like the way the poem resolves itself with its closing lines. It brings hope to the desperation and sometimes, if you can hold onto hope with a tight grip, you can pull yourself out.

[Rhine Wolf]

you had me worried there for a moment. your faith is really strong! keep it that way! as to the poem it shows how vonrable we all really are and how easaly we are influensed by "friends" a great write!

[Carl Fraser]

Welcome to the cafe Diana, damm glad to see you here and great write which I can relate to. We have to think about out life as a drop in a bucket compared to eternity , so stand in faith my friend much much happiness awaits you soon.....................Blessings, Carl,