CHARLOTTE

 CHARLOTTE 

 

Cold spring waters flow

Like rainbows colored friends

Who touch us beneath a cloud

Of love that never ends

 

The rainbow shifts and flows

From points in her dark eyes

She swims from fluid point

To warm and gathering sighs

 

The song of longing now as

It was even then

Sporadic at the start has grown

To question when

 

You know but silence in your mind

Left to fester as if blind

Solace is no more

Terrible violence tearing at my kind

 

The dark is gathering fast

Creation clouding o`er

Feelings that will  not pass

Become a revolving door

 

----  Eagle Cruagh

Reviews

[Brittany]

Feelings that will not pass, Become a revolving door - favorite line.

Very nicely done. Good descriptions. Beautiful. Lucky girl.

[jessdixon]

I really like the second stanza of this poem. Beautiful work!

[Jenna]

I really like the imagery. And I like how the shifting in tone is pretty noticeable.

[Mary]

verry beautiful

[OceanTropic]

I really enjoyed the first stanza "rainbows colored friends". Such beautiful imagery.


I also enjoyed the metaphor of the revolving door. It has so many underlying meanings and it works so well.

Good write.

[Gurdeep...The Lost]

Thats a lovely work now.....)) keep it up..!

[Marie]

Oh, lovely--the rainbow shifting and flowing from her eyes...but then it all changes...