MELODY AT SEA

MELODY AT SEA

 

Catch the wind

The ship flows

Down the slip

Where she goes

 

Raise the cloth

Feel her free

Hit the jib

Pass in the lee

 

Raise a glass

Wind has won

Toss it off

She`s just a lass

 

Fragrant wind

In open sea

New fresh life

For Honey Bee

 

-----Eagle Cruagh

 

Reviews

[Tim Lion]

Yes. The sea! I'm married to her, you know. Even though my water time is on ships and workboats, not sailboats, this one fit me. I know the feeling; the feeling in the movement of the words and waves, the cool, salty wind...the freedom. And I love it.
You captured that freedom in tone as well as lyric here.

Thoroughly enjoyed.

T

[....]

Very poetic and charming,
enjoyed the rhyme scheme & flow.

[Warren L.G De Mills]

This was a good piece. It felt, fun reading it. Short and simple though i must confess i don't know what "pass in the lee" or "hit the jib" means so I believe that may have hindered my comprehension of the piece.

[Emily Rae]

This is so carefree-- I could literally feel the breeze on my cheek as I read it. But I have to ask...WHERE'S JOHN?!?!

[Rohan Tandon]

i luv d mental picture it paints! so nice :) luv it

[EMMIE]

Sounds adventurous and I like the rhyming! This is very creative.

[Katseye]

Reminds me of trips on my dad's ship... granted his wasn't a sail boat. Made me smile.

[Marie]

"Where she (go`s){goes}..."
Why did you change the rhyming scheme on the third verse. YOu could easily transpose the first lines.
Good job. It has the sound of the wind and the sea.